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Middle East in America

Submitted by Barbara Writes on Thu, 2014-08-14 00:44

Palestinian neighbors Post to twitter
about America's racial conflict
twitter tips to deal with tear gas
dispersed in Ferguson Missouri.

Peaceful protest turned war zone
media detained harassed for no reason
police, riot officers, swat team, military trucks
it's like Middle East fighting in America.

The president has been brief
Militarized county police
Protestors chant
Tear gas and rubber bullets fired
Molly cocktail become fire bombs
War zone in Ferguson

State police take charge

Unrest fades peace abound.

Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Rula

Thu, 2014-08-14 14:11

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I've enjoyed reading this. You've captured the scene so well.
I could see how many people are feeling the oppression on other parts of the world and far away from America. I think this is, though you'd see it bad for you country, paints some hope on the overall scene. It is the extreme opposite of something I have written and submitted for the "New Form workshop" about how deaf, blind and mute are some all over the world.
Thanks for sharing.

PS. I think there is something missing in the last line.

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Barbara Writes

Fri, 2014-08-15 00:24

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Thanks for your view of this. I could paint some hope to the end tonight bc things in Furgenson Missouri has changed so I can add to this the change in real time. Maybe a couple of stanza more.

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raj

Fri, 2014-08-15 02:59

You have painted the picture in St. Louis, Missouri so vividly.

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

Rula

Fri, 2014-08-15 12:38

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is the repitition of the first stanzas intended?

Still I see the first word in this line incomplete [ ish just got real ]

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Barbara Writes

Fri, 2014-08-15 22:31

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Thanks when revising this the computer was glitching somehow. I wasn't sure how it would turn out. going to try to fix the double paste

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