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fading away

Submitted by lovedly on Sat, 2014-08-02 12:53

We all fade away

I am fading away from each one of you
as I gradually remove each one
who have no interaction
but for their own praise
makes me a damn craze

I continue to post comments
they hardly comment
gradually I shall too just glimmer
in the dusk of the distant horizon
be not amazed
I shall soon apparition
into a glimpse in the darkness
just see me merge away...
as you precede
my lighted pathway
till then have a good day

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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emeka ozurumba

Sat, 2014-08-02 13:12

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The poEm is 4 neopoets .but lyrical

lovedly

Sat, 2014-08-02 13:29

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lyrical poetry

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Ian.T

Sat, 2014-08-02 17:22

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You not having a go at Sparrow are you as he has talons that scratch and a sharp beak that drills hole in eyes lol.
I write these pieces often but to no avail, keep writing and cursing, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

lovedly

Sat, 2014-08-02 19:41

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you speak in an idiomatic parlance....
mine is straight like starlit wisdom ..
each one on his own ..

you are the flame...
I be the candle....
let both ends burn.....

life undoubtedly shall be shortened...
but glory twill be shared
for ever unforgotten....

you are the star
in the middle of the universe....
I one amongst a galaxy ...

you can be traced
within the universe ...
who shall try to find me...

anonymous that I for ever shall be..

thanks to thee.....
Amen!

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alidzain

Sat, 2014-08-02 21:44

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fading away?! no you don't! You're here in my heart and you won't be fading anywhere.

a friend without a face
separated by the distance
makes me wonder
why he prefer to be
mysterious...

when he writes in short verses
i'm blessed with such grace
when he writes in long verses
he makes ME a damn craze

he told me to fill in the puntuations
but i say its not going to happen
still i enjoy our moments together
for he's a friend with lively character

did you ever wonder
when there's no comment
if you've stunned the reader
with your lyrical art?

just because there are none
doesn't mean they didn't read them
maybe what they want to say
has already been said....

Alid

lovedly

Sat, 2014-08-02 22:48

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no not ring
as in wrung
damn it

you ring bells all over the Internet
a punctuation less poet
is still being read
ring ring okay add another tring

thanks the door bell rings
can you hear it?
no u too are deaf like me
mark my punctuation,
have ye?
you refine me

as you in your last par encourage me
wow well said
Alid

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Ian.T

Sun, 2014-08-03 06:20

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That you remain hidden from all your friends here is not good but we can accept your point.
BUT we would love to meet and greet one Loved that we could see and know in your true form, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Geezer

Sun, 2014-08-03 09:53

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Is that like knowledge of astronomy?
Last par encouragement?
Balderdash!
~ Gee

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lovedly

Sun, 2014-08-03 11:37

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doubt is not clear

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emeka ozurumba

Mon, 2014-08-04 04:19

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you speak in an idiomatic parlance....
mine is straight like starlit wisdom ..
each one on his own ..

you are the flame...
I be the candle....
let both ends burn.....

life undoubtedly shall be shortened...
but glory twill be shared
for ever unforgotten....

you are the star
in the middle of the universe....
I one amongst a galaxy ...

you can be traced
within the universe ...
who shall try to find me...

anonymous that I for ever shall be..

poetry is so fun with a love that's real for its craving
but can it die.........
for the love of love .....NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO

lovedly

Mon, 2014-08-04 10:45

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4 ur elation

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lovedly

Sun, 2021-11-14 20:20

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now poets are not cemented
read it any way
very old poem I say

edit it still you may
present days kids on NEO

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