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My Friend

There is sadness
Portrayed that seeks my soul
Let us tend to your hurts
Where love is the potion.

Hold us close
Others are kept at bay
This fear of being
Must decline as it is fragile

Think of us each morning
Before you start your day
We will walk with you
Along rough ways

Picking up the stones
That are strewn there
Then you may journey
Without these cares

Take up our ways
As they are there to use
Just for a fleeting time
As we have been told of you.

Just hold us now and then.
Our lightness will attend
There you will not be scarred
Your fear will subside.

That walking this path with you,
To feel, touch then share,
Know we care.

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Free verse
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Just a word or two to someone dear, out there! From someone in here!
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love this.

Thank you for caring,
allowing me to embrace
the gentle side
of your living grace.

I will bathe myself
to shed away my sorrow
so that a new me
will be born tomorrow.

Then I will return
with a rewarding smile,
for your kindness
is a ray of sunshine.

that to me, it is a gift
more precious than gold

Alid

A lovely poetic comment as I said to Loved we now have three poems for the price of one, Thank you,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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it's just for practice sake.

Alid

that to me, it is a gift
more precious than gold

except the last line
should be matching

like

that to me, is like a gift
more precious than
between two poets a rift

or whatever such like gold???????

Child, take up our ways....WHHY WHYYW HHHY WHYYYYYYY?OUR WAYS!
As they are there for you
Just for a fleeting time
As we have been told of you.

why not say

o child be yourself
experience and learn .... from our follies do stay away.... the midnight oil do burn and experience and learn... what holds in the folds of eternity... tis reality----- we only shall pass our silliness.... oh child believe in your self ...we should not convey our thoughts... as per our times---- take your own steps... one at a time and the truth of all existence do combine

I am not going to share all stupidity of mine.... your own experience will be and shall as it must and ought to be an exclusive find .....by your own mind

I don't want to play about ...as you know I myself have a little clout.... and know too much I myself doubt..!!!!. words to this effect Ian .....why tell him how and where to stand... he has two legs of his own... let him use them all alone ..tell him to use his mind ...as all time changes ..o man ..pass not the past of ours if you can

Both you and Alid have written your own pieces on this theme as a comment to my first attempt.
So we should as I do, the three pieces are poems in their own writes/rights thank you for reading and such a a good lyrical reply,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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man
Ian
all in sms
don't ask
juss guess

I become tired sometimes as the years take their toll of my friends and family, the children's teacher said that I have finished my tasks here, but have a lot of writing to do.
It's a heck of a final task before they put the pennies on my tired eyes.
My friends need to have someone to talk to in the dark days, that can fetch a burning brand to light the way they have to travel.
But there are many that do these things, here and in other places, all to my learning are so welcome and it is quite a shock to most.
Young loved I know that you are near to those gates but not as near as some I love.
This piece was just another light to guide but not to interfere, in the teachings learned there is only one person totally responsible for each ones actions here in this physical world and that is the person themselves.
I must rewrite two of my pieces they were titled "To My Friends" and the other was "To My Loves", I wrote them a few years ago now probably 20 but adapted them for a service to one of my friends we lost back in 99.
But this is becoming morbid and not good for the music in my ears so I will bid you goodnight young Bard, and notice all the good things that are in your life and build on them by sharing with others,
Yours as always Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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all friends depart

the hour passeth my way too ...when many friends once loving and true ....passeth this way into oblivion... earlier than they should have taken to heaven...... All those who are seeded by love and lust of parents ...are blessed to be taken away some day
So don't grieve this way ... you too will pass away... some day....
till then between heaven and hell do play
let friends pass away
for no power within you can seek them to stay

so friend let friends pass away
in solace piece by piece
so do the heavenly stars do say
soon each one of you
must come the Milky pathway
for indefinitely finally to stay

so pray all friends pass away
when they have to
so that they can await
for you too...

The heartbeat may cease
the mortal body may wither
but in my mind and heart
dear friends are forever
for they are a part of me
and i am a part of them
they'll live in me
now until the end
let time take their mortal forms
consign them into the earth
i will still have the memories
the legacy, priceless in its worth
wait for me, dear friends
till this journey ends
and we will be
together once again....

Alid

do elaborate
some r buried
some cremated

after death where is the rondezvous
do say
anyway
we all will follow
a similar pathway

to say our spirits will be reunited. What was buried and cremated are only mortal shells.

Alid

Loved has always been asked to join me in a cup of tea at my cave, maybe I should have a different abode lol.
Take care and go well,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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as you journey on there you will find each has their own way of being, then again each has to appear to others as they are known or seen by them.
You may see me as a person standing there in my picture on the profile that is how you will know it is me as there is no pretence in that other place.
As we know not what you look like here, we will know you by other things, that you may appear as a colour or feeling then so be it but your shape then can be anything.
You should see Exora, one of the higher teachers, we have asked him/her to show us the real self, he usually is seen as a cloaked entity, so as the cloak was removed, there glowing with a quiet blue light was his form, so there was a learning curve for us all.
You see what you want to see, so I will be there at my cave with that cup of tea, and we can think as we wish,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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"Along rough ways

Picking up the stones
That are strewn there"

This has a mythological touch,
and yet seems to be in the now of today as I read it.
Enjoyed greatly Ian, well done.

L Ann.

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

Thank you for your visit, loved is always asking about the after times, and I always say there is that cup of tea waiting at my cave for him in the now as time is as nothing.
The part about the pathway being strewn with stones, this is where I have been of help to a person and helped clear the pathway, nothing is for ever as we are, the change from one state to another, well who knows.
Take care young lady and walk well,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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Nothing is forever as

That you know nothing
is forever nothing much
about us is known
this universe is a vast home
mundane for those who so want to feel
for those who follow
only there is no reprieve

I gently seek indulgence of now
and here

What is beyond, beyond
I don't know
nor do I fear

Know me just as a passer by
you will
as much as I will
all pass by

none has ever come to stay
death is inscribed on the very day
birth becomes profound
and your parents
in a form have you now around

Seek me not,
I am just a passing one
mean no harm to anyone

seek my mind for known wisdom
imagination all have
O great one
Thy kingdom may come

It is our want to reach out to infinity, there you may find those things you have searched for, but here and now don't let the reality cloud your vision so that you let things go, good piece of writing there , you should make it into a poem with a few changes,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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I already have and await your blessings there

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