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Systematic Destruction...

Submitted by Geezer on Tue, 2014-07-22 22:24

Dull aches of the Lion-Heart
Fantasies smashed and left like wreckage
on the 'Yellow Brick Road'

The Wizard has left the scene

Shocked monkeys lie twitching
as he looks to the sky for the twister
that destroyed his beliefs

“We're not in Kansas anymore”

Tin-men don't cry, they just rust away
waiting for rescue.
The oil-can is empty

and gas is cheap.

Night settles around the breeding-grounds
The Velvet Fog of your voice
turns to sirens of despair

The bomb is waiting to explode

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Free verse
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Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Wed, 2014-07-23 15:02

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for my son Spencer, he is going through some rough times right now.

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Roscoe Lane

Wed, 2014-07-23 17:52

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This is a poem about real life versus our youthful dreams. Unfortunately as adults we're thrown into the lions den of reality. Your poem tells the story perfectly. Great work Regards Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

Geezer

Wed, 2014-07-23 20:42

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I had hoped that it would come across that way. ~ Gee

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Geezer

Sun, 2020-10-25 16:29

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I am pleased to report that my son is doing better. he still struggles, but has been helped by the removal of his thyroid as it was dysfunctioning, and now takes meds. he is my youngest and has three children, a lovely girlfriend and a job. ~ Geez.
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