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"A Journey..."*

from the...

Water
Of
My
Birth

to the...

Ground where my
Remains lie an
An extinguished
Vessel decomposing under
Earth

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
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How does this theme appeal to you?
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Last few words: 
*Acrostic Now read the by verses along with the capital letters going down
Editing stage: 

Comments

David

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In ink,
David

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great imagination in coming up with an acrostic on womb to grave...

raj (sublime_ocean)

In ink,
David

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an excellent write that conforms to the acrostic art, I hope that you have looked up the A-Z of poetry as there are many varieties of acrostics that are fun to do,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

The rules for acrostic are a bit stretched but the spirit remains............stan

that I will be posted in time. Thanks for reviewing.

In ink
David

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I thought this was rather clever BEFORE I realised it was an acrostic - yeas a bit slow, but I hadn't had my morning coffee :-). I was really impressed when I woke up and saw the full thing. Jx

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It took me some time to polish it with the use of Birth in place of Beginning.

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Well, it's all the better for the polishing then. Jx

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