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I Am
I'm a woman
At once vulnerable and strong,
Able to hurt and be hurt in return.
Treat me well and the rewards
Will be everlasting,
My love is constant
Treat me badly
And I will erupt with a different passion
Take cover and hide.
I contain emotions
So great, sometimes I feel,
I'm about ready to explode
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
lou
Wed, 2011-01-05 04:47
Guru
Thanks, i'll think about taking 'at once' out.
love Lou.
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
mand
Wed, 2011-01-05 04:10
Hi Lou
There is no messing around with this one, it lays it on the line, the message is: don't mess with me and I'll give you all my love and more. You are a power house of emotions which can go either way. You are a warrior full of passion.
I love it. Brilliant poem, honest, steadfast and determined. "I am" perfect title
Love Mand xxxxxx
lou
Wed, 2011-01-05 04:50
Amazon LOL
Mand,
you make me sound like an Amazon.
Love Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
mand
Wed, 2011-01-05 04:57
I have haven't I
Trouble is you'd have to cut one of your breasts off. Lol
Love Mand xxxx
lou
Wed, 2011-01-05 07:23
Ouch
I haven't cut one of my boobs off and i don't EVER !!!! intend to. lmao
love lou xx
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Geezer
Wed, 2011-01-05 04:10
The only thing...
predictable about a woman, is that they are going to be unpredictable! One never knows what might make them erupt! You have some good thoughts here, maybe just a bit of smoothing out, and it will be a great poem. ~ Love and hugs, ~ Gee
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lou
Wed, 2011-01-05 04:55
Well
my good Gee one could say men can be very predictable, especially when it comes to thier opinion of women LOL
Not blowing my own horn, but i'm already quite happy with the result .
Thanks
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!