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Hastening all toward our death ! passed 90

Hastening all toward our death
this I don't at all agree with
do you know,
BIG
elder Bush,
jumped from a helicopter at 90
he wasn't trying to hasten death

but perhaps wanted a snap mid page
at that youthful age
which he sustained at 90

and

the other day
the oldest guy did lay
at 111 he didn't have a mind to go away
but then was he not kept in an ICU
and
why not, if not

as also Nelson Mandela
was alive till a ripe old age 94, I think
till he died
so many cried
well......

Death is a distant dream
some day we all will grace it,
it so does seem
it's still relavent
so amend your beautiful version
with grace

let not anyone find of fear of death
a trace.
Kindly friend do it
and live with grace.

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I was going right along until the last stanza. Then I think the message got a bit off track in the first two lines of that final stanza :
Let not anyone find of fear of death... try deleting the first"of"
a trace.....try lest a mere trace
And death Does come to us all and too often without having made an appointment before hand.........stan

from the drain of garbage
you salvaged me

one month and a week later

never mind
more shall follow us

Stan so SHINE

new
Hi lovedly

I was going right along until the last stanza. Then I think the message got a bit off track in the first two lines of that final stanza :
Let not anyone find of fear of death... try deleting the first"of"
a trace.....try lest a mere trace
And death Does come to us all and too often without having made an appointment before hand.........stan

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