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Sure you do stare

Sure you stare
I gaze at you
as you stare
then watch you take off
with your lovely pair
despite not much hair

in any case I'm bald
I don't care who
at my head does
gaze or stare

as long as they leave my balance hair
I'd love their stare.
take care

yours too!!!
I seem to share...

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Do you really care?
as long as they leave my balance hair? The one you brush across?

cheers,
Jess
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Maybe there is a faint chance, that our loved is referring to the hair inside the inner ear canal that is excited by a gritty material which gives us a sense of Balance.
No that's going to far outside of our thinking, just have to accept the line is wrong ???
Take care Y'all I still love you no matter what,
Yours Ian.T
There's a little titter running around the room here, I shall capture it with serious thought, and send it on.. La, La.

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

thanks for the interlude

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I need give reference to Ian's

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A TRIBUTE TO AN AUSSIE POET PAR EXCELLENCE JESS

George Bernard Shaw said

"The reasonable man adapts himself to the world;
the unreasonable one persists in trying
to adapt the world to himself.
Therefore, all progress depends on the unreasonable man."

I have also swum against the current
all my life
even though I ain't a swimmer
yes
et all breathless!

Many friends fall by the way side
as I alone stride
the world takes a pride
when one has gone aside

then one is remembered
on an off occasion
at times
some are forgotten
ere!!!

you are young my Jess
a friend indeed
I now guess

But for you I do profess
none would have ever read me
Yes
Oh!
JESS! (((((((.In caps

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