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//// DIRTY MORE (feat)////
legged calve tanned godess
dirty white flip flops
spray on denim spandex
sucked in right
to the shadow lust
craving
lipgloss like glazed donut
im pained for a sugar rush
lip licking
tonque searching
quest
salted stinking sated
soles
with baby oil squeezes
when sumer knock down
sun turns to night
vampire suckfest
anquish
in fan droning breezes
blowing stray strands
on wide thighs
hot moist plunder
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Comments
weirdelf
Mon, 2014-07-07 09:21
One can overlook the spelling and punctuation when reading
to oneself. However it becomes criticial when reading aloud.
im pained for a sugar rush
I'm pained for a sugar rush
when sumer knock down
when summer knocks down
https://soundcloud.com/user536630132/dirty-more-feat-by-esker
cheers,
Jess
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lovedly
Mon, 2014-07-07 09:36
you could perhaps
get a compy
if spell check done
twill help
Esker raj is n Ontario
do make an effort to meet him
message him if u will
loved now lovedly
only technically
Esker
Mon, 2014-07-07 14:59
spelink errers
maketh much of dem...
spell chack is okay....
knocks down.....i was thinking..like the old knock down...the heat...boredom..
excitement.......but i could have put that in....
but thanks for catching that.....
punctuation is important too...
i think i remember...like capitalizing the I
it's only a short hit on the space bar,
and a minor key-stroke!
i am suprised at my vintage use of things like
"pained"
im....vim...tim..limb....I'm I am...
imma.....hard to tell with my writing
all over the place...
order....
will take it in note...
thank you!
weirdelf
Mon, 2014-07-07 18:43
nothing can catch all the spelling and grammar
variations of the English language, they are too diverse and complex. They also happen to make it the most powerful and expressive language in the world, if not the most aesthetic.
I just run with it, and make it up when necessary. Few can tell.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry