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the light of stars

Submitted by Seren on Fri, 2014-06-27 13:23

The light ripples
as night comes
and falling
forever falling

I brush the satin
skirts of night,
I ease onto the black
bed of stars

Twirling galaxies
ignite on my palms
to stretch the universe
within my reach

a handful of moons
a brilliant milky way
lies within heavens
lost to our eyes

Rumors of shooting
stars fall in my sight
as I turned around
It was reflected in all

The light splintered
and shattered over all
tumbling into day
I now sleep with eternity

Resting in my gaze

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Free verse
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Ian.T

Fri, 2014-06-27 13:59

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Just a few catches here and there but the theme holds well, in a moment I will read again and drift with the theme to where you have been, the energy of life has us held here for a while yet and our young Aussie Lady will hold the torch for us and relight the heavens.
It is good that I can talk so and know that the words are felt.
I have read again and the expanse of eternity turned its face to your eyes, the eyes of the soul felt the distance realms of all things we try to comprehend.
I think this is a lovely write and it's good to read of your journey, the children danced as the stars were made time and time again.
Take care and know we are thinking of you,
Yours Ian, Anne and the children xx

I will reach out he said in my soul
I will hold all your dreams
Then further I will hold a reality
Yet I touch nothing for all time..

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

alidzain

Wed, 2014-07-02 21:20

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look into the mirror
there's a star there
whose light inspires
in the beauty of words
each time i read them
i know i am blessed
and i thank the heavens
for their gentle caress
beautiful as always
are the thoughts i have
thank you my star
for giving me
the courage to dream

Alid

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