I understand your view. I too sometimes dislike the use of profanity used in a work such as a poem, unless it is done with taste or in a way which makes sense. Perhaps I should have left somewhat of a small explanation in my last words, I apologize. I'd like to provide that explanation now.

I myself am heavily influenced by the style of the beat generation, particularly by Kerouac. And I came up with the idea of this poem after I finished watching the film adaptation of Big Sur by Kerouac ( I have also read the original work). My inspiration was gained from how Kerouac's thoughts flowed and the observations he made during the course of the work. It's really tough for me to explain. I would highly recommend watching some clips of the film, to understand his mind.

My work here was supposed to somewhat mimic his style, but applied to my own observation and experience.

As far as the profanity goes, I actually felt like it belonged here. When taking the style I am writing in into consideration it seems normal to me. Done with taste in respect to point at hand. That said, I don't feel that it degrades the work, I just see it as word choice. I'm not the only poet to swear and I've seen it done in a lot of different works. It brings a somewhat raw element of emotion into the mix. The best way I can explain it is that I am not sugar coating what went through my head.

I also agree that this work could have worked in prose. I knew that before I even wrote the poem. But I chose to write it as a poem because then I could control the structure of the words. It all has to do with the flow of the ideas.

Also your comment on more optimism. True, I don't really see this piece as really optimistic, but then again I don't see it as extremely vulgar or pessimistic as well. And I don't necessarily think that poetry needs to be any of those things or focus on invoking any certain ideal. If poetry was set to just be a bunch of optimistic pieces then what's the point of it? I don't see any room in that ideal for exploring different emotions and being unique or creative.

The poem is what it is. And this is what came out this time. I hope my explanation provides some clarity. Thank you again for reading,

Thank you for the kind words. This poem was a whole new venture for me and I'm glad ya liked it.