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today there is a burning fire ---- within me
The poetry please!
today there is a burning fire within me
to perform a newer kind of poetry
this ignites the infallible minds of humanity
such a kind of poetry
where two lovers face one another
and
as one smiles
air-full of kisses fly
and
the crowds in great abandon....
hide behind a veil of time
no clouds are needed...
they all want an audience blind
so be it my way to say
stay
do read my works
once in a way....
have a good night or day
where ever you are...
You may...
This is another thought of the day!
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
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Comments
loved
Fri, 2014-06-06 05:51
burning fire
error posting
loved
Seren
Sat, 2014-06-07 13:10
Loved
If you got rid of the commentary, this would be a good poem, with a few small changes it could be amazing, you have some great lines in this its just a shame you spoil it with all the fru fra...
love Jayne x
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
loved
Sun, 2014-06-08 00:55
Advice seeded
any better tis?
loved
Ian.T
Sat, 2014-06-07 19:17
Loved
I second what Jayne has said about the intro..
The theme and the write doesn't need it,
as it can stand on its own words,
Yours Ian.T
.
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