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Quest ...your eyes......
Quest to see
your eyes......
I have seen many eyes
they speak nothing
but the truth
mine speak of love and youth..
my eyes
I thought were beautiful,
till I saw in her eyes so blue...
so lovely and so sparkingly true
the babe was tromping about...
as if in ones youth
the pet had eyes blue
better than mine
how glad I am
all now knew.
our eyes are blue
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
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Comments
Ian.T
Thu, 2014-06-05 19:05
Loved
A quietly good piece, have I read this one before ???
Take care young Bard, Yours Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
loved
Fri, 2014-06-06 02:57
Yes I think so
pending for a week
hanging or drowning in the stream
which?/
loved
scribbler
Fri, 2014-06-06 07:07
Hi loved
Excellent use of rhyme in a free form poem. The end kinda fades out though..............stan
loved
Fri, 2014-06-06 14:21
rivers of freedom have ripples
they rise and fall like empires
but the end none can control
neither you nor I
the fading life
must endure
what is there to ensure????
loved