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Point of View

Submitted by Ian.T on Fri, 2014-05-30 04:24

I stood there with you
Looking out of your window
It was bright for me

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Structured: Eastern
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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How does this theme appeal to you?
Last few words: 
Points of view (Senyru) for those hat only see the dark out there..
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weirdelf

Fri, 2014-05-30 09:12

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it was bright for me too.

cheers,
Jess
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Ian.T

Fri, 2014-05-30 14:41

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That the view from your window was bright was good for me to hear, take care young traveller,
Yours Ian.T

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Emina Smajevic

Fri, 2014-05-30 13:38

so so good :))

Emina
Maybe it's better to stay completely within
as fire hides in metal
as water hides in rock.
Rumi

Ian.T

Fri, 2014-05-30 14:43

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Never let others darken your view, thanks for your visit,
Yours as always Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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