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Choked

My throat has a lump
nearby there is no sump
where one can go and throw

The voice yells
go man go
but then I to maintain dignity
do swallow,
how shallow may be yes
may not be

but sometimes
my own voice chokes me…

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A good theme, but you must never be afraid of saying what you think, we have a freedom most times so that we don't have to choke on our words, yet some talk without thought, then it would be better to choke the words back, Take care young Bard I am waiting for you to be in Jesses workshop, lol.
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

the coal
the sallow sun
simmer steam
the lush ruin

the wonder
the harsh and
sorrowful
thing of love

excellent poem Loved
a great tense in this
a haunted feel to it..

thank you

passion like a coal fire
creeping...smoulder smoke
in misted woods
and scented winds...

excellent poem Loved.......
a great tense in this
a haunted feel to it..

They say,,,
I talk of praise
when guys like you need all of it ...Dear Esker
you are a Canadian
I will meet you next time
I come to Ottawa

loved

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It is a pity that this is not a few years ago, I was in Ottawa a few times, use to write on beer mats in Fridays and in the Mayflower pubs, but that was another life, I will see if I can find the odd one from that time, that I scribbled for someone.
I have some beautiful memories from there, a short 32 years and 3 months ago, poetic what.
Take care young Bard, see I know that you can write well, so why be amazed when someone else sees your work and agrees lol,
Yours as always Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Canada is...and what of Ottawa

as you know
a place of abounding beauty
as along long driving routes
you go
and all know the hills
where there is snow
there we test our sliding skills
wow wonderful still

but Ottawa is one out of the blue
tis a beauty to see it too.

I have been across the globe
so many places
but learned a lot from the Ottawa zoo

about man and animal
as I continued my research

Hope you will recall your loving days
ask Esker where does he stay
we both will have beer
yes beer ,
no tea as you say
coffee capuccino I love too
hope you will have some to

near the Museum will be our rondezvous
come along Esker will host us two
and in return bring a sack of tea will you
a gift if Esker does take good or I shall help you..

loved

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I would love to return to Canada, but my wife wouldn't let me for some reason lol and we have only been together 13 years.
I would love to meet you all but that will have to be in another place where we will all be free, free of Earthly ties unless you pass this way one day.
I will now that I know make a cappuccino for you, it will be perfect, yet you will never need to eat or drink again or ever fall ill, a forever place I will hold open for you, ask for Sadie and say that I have come to visit Granddad today.
The places in Ottawa you have spoken of are fresh in my mind, these are memories that I never leave behind.
Then on to Toronto where I stayed but that's another story from a lovely few days,
Yours as always, Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

I shall speak of Toronto later
after I have had my Cappuccino
and the chill in my throat vanishes
as I order more of it

hail storm or snow
cAPpUccINO
to it I shall never
ever
say no!

loved

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If you should need some glasses and are in Toronto just let me know I can recommend a grand place, and the price if I give you a message may be a forego, Yours with riddles many of a life I would wish to know, Yours Ian.T
By the way how is the Eastern Americas this morning lol??

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

you could have saved this bard
200 dollars
I just purchased one mono chromatic
as my eye sight wants it

hope next time u will have up ur sleeve
requirement of mine
just guess what
ask SADDIE
SHE WILL know it
thanks Ian

loved

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sigh....no money..no car...ottawa is huge.....huge...
i drink coffee no beer now....
got plans....plans to stay alive...
hit older and older age..

like ottwa is has so mnay bridiged and i love bridges
coffe shops..would love to meet one day...i have in past
met so many......

shall pay for two
tc
we all are poets to create history
you have already
i don't drink much either
but coffee yes
cappuccino coldddddddd......................
but it will be very nice to meet you

loved

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