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Laptop Bugginess

Submitted by Barbara Writes on Tue, 2014-05-20 00:28

FB bugginess getting me down
Putting viruses on my laptop
Adware spyware making me crash
My websites won't respond

Took a pill fell past asleep
While refreshing updating my computer system
Restart restart before I'm out
Woke up my laptop still restarting

A little computer rap, if you will

Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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weirdelf

Thu, 2014-05-22 12:16

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in an angry ocker accent.
I think, even though it is not your way, a few cuss words and slang would not go astray to convey the anger and frustration. Also needs rhyme or alliteration to make it more "rappy".

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Barbara Writes

Thu, 2014-05-22 16:32

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Barbara Writes

Thu, 2014-05-22 16:32

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Lol. This was a rough draft. I have rhymed it but haven't post as I'm still working on it. Wanting to record it with some beats. Can't get that annoying son of mine to record me.

Gonna hear your version now.

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