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Spirals

Submitted by brittle light on Mon, 2010-12-13 16:40

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a spiral is a nice shape
round and round
up and down
three dimensional too

circles, they're ok
lines are cool
but, spirals-------------
-----(here, speechless)---

springy
active
and playful
dancing,
in graceful formulas,
spaciousness
and wonder

spirals wind,
and rewind
and remind me
of the universe
and my connection
with the ALL
and this,
by definition,
definitly
includes
you!

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crypticbard

Mon, 2010-12-13 18:31

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Reminds me of a well loved slinky or shock absorber springs, perhaps even spiral noodles! Playful and full of life. A very fun poem to read and explore. Far too many serious poems out. Thanks for sharing AL!

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brittle light

Tue, 2010-12-14 17:29

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yes, sometimes I do weary of so many serious, and downright depressing poems. They are beautifully written at times, and quite humanly relevent, but ....fun is good too! variety being the spice of life....yes?

thanks again

Al

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crypticbard

Mon, 2011-01-03 23:12

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Of course, YES! And more they may flourish :-))

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