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A Reason

Submitted by Ian.T on Sat, 2014-05-03 19:08

I sat a while there in the forest
I thought of most things as they came to me
Yet could I grasp the meaning of all things
Now I even doubt the next day as it will arrive

Where do I go I asked what do I do now
Can I equate this life of mine to purpose
Suppose I had not passed this way
What changes would be missing

There in the quiet of the forest glade
my thoughts became clear stretching out
As the carpet of blue bells seemed to ring
Telling the world that they were there.

Could I shout to the world with such beauty
Can we all be so pure that reason just glows
Do we become sceptical of our being alive
As evening draws near do we lose perspective.

I had to smile at my reasoning as if I had no mind
There in the forest reality came and touched me
I could only be, the only one, to fill my gaps here
Then, and only then, the gaps would mend the universe.

It came to me in waves that to be here is now
There is no one that can change who you are
So I walked back out into the world and smiled
Now I know that I have filled my purpose

No matter what!

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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emeka ozurumba

Tue, 2014-05-06 13:15

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very purposeful and with rich deep meaning, Ian very good philosophy

Ian.T

Tue, 2014-05-06 17:44

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My thoughts go out to you all there, that one day there will be a peace within the children of the world.
Thank you for your visit and comment, I write as the thoughts flow, and hope that the think helps.
I have a multitude of things to write of, this was just a break in time, thanks again, and know that you are all in my thoughts, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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loved

Tue, 2014-05-06 15:00

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you have lost all rights to reason
sitting isolated in a cave
with friend Loved
sipping white tea

what can you do
but say
let's reason
and do you think Loved will listen

summon the ultimate powers that be
and then ask
SADDIE

how will she feel
when Loved runs under times wheel
and you also lose ur reasoning
and then Ian
who will be screaming
now why r u asking
me?

loved

Ian.T

Tue, 2014-05-06 17:40

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I have walked in the forests grasp to talk to you, it is a beauty that is in sight and thought, this is where a quiet descends and holds the thoughts true.
You did not need to ask of me or Sadie, that you sip tea with us in the now, or at a later date, it is still the now though in a different form.
Loved we all accept that your state is preordained, and that you chose the pathway you walk.
It is for you to learn of things you need to fill the odd gaps in your perfection, Loved is Loved's most prominent enemy,
But in the way of all things we all have to learn, mostly of our selves, there we will find as we see our own shadows a being that is here to learn.
Young Bard hold not the dreams of others, and hold not your own dreams, as they are of the past, look to the door that opens for you, it will show you the real now, and the path to take,
Yours as always, Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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