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princess, a celestial alignment

Submitted by emeka ozurumba on Sat, 2014-05-03 09:53

purr galactic miser
purl pendulums Orion
feet dance miss her
skeletal mist star

surreal lasers mercuric
beam smudge
her prime, behold!
jet teasers

the jovial swings
a form needed
its rite dust-phase
beyond cubicle estranged

despoilment repair cardinal
internship regal
legal of loam
trepidation silk atom

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Rula

Sat, 2014-05-03 10:44

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This goes over my head. You're always good with alliteration and consonance.
Your word choice is distinguished but I always need a hint.

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emeka ozurumba

Tue, 2014-05-06 12:55

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the poem is about the effect of time( the pendulum), the princess represents this emblem, also time is the galactic miser cause our time on earth are frugal and short. the end of the poem is the definite end of man in estranged happenstance

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emeka ozurumba

Tue, 2014-05-06 13:01

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legal of loam means also a connotation to being buried in loam soil, while trepidation refers to the nervousness in which we await our predicament,in stanza three the jovial swings is satiric because the swing of the clock is not jovial to abrupt and bring the end of man, dust-phase is the phase of lying in dust in the cubicle of the coffin

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