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Senryu

The brook always speaks
It sounds like babble to ears
Doesn't speak to thee

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Definition of SENRYU: a 3-line unrhymed Japanese poem structurally similar to haiku but treating human nature usually in an ironic or satiric vein We can not understand what the brook is saying but nature does, once we become one with nature we can understand the stories of travel from the brook. We are lost in our human world and in general we just see the beauty of the brook but not it's relationship with nature. The brook speaks to nature and softly caresses its soil skin. That is the purpose of Haiku and Senryu to find the comparison between nature and human life.
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I liked this one and the take on Senryu mentioned in the last few words. Join Barbara's workshop...it is fun..

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

For as long as you and I have been here why do you keeping calling me Eduardo, have we not developed a relationship, try Eddie only because I like it better.
Thanks for your comment, but no more workshops for me.
I find the Japanese poems to easy, because I am a Taoist so I think that way already.
The traditional poetry is very hard for me, so in my prospective that is where I need the most work

Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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Thanks for allowing me the privilege of calling you Eddie. Noted your response about workshops. You have tickled my mind though about "Taoist" form of poetry :)

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

There is nothing to do with allowing or wanting it is the honor conveyed in a long relationship. I find you to be honorable. So it is the proper respect to you. My friend.

Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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Thanks Eddie for your kind words. Respect is mutual my dear friend...

Warm regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

Just keep being you...
Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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