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//////////////////////////////////////////////s l i v e r //shiver///////////////////////////////////
back arch beneath the starch linen shirt
resting on the laurel spine
the wool spun weave
of a slither loom that shunts
quick as a cats eye
the clan
the tartan
color
bright and scheming
spring air in the flags
and whistling in the
wires
while at the horizon
a blush of
morning
crawls
suffused
fuscia dreamer
the light like a sliver
rising
from the blank moment
of a lost hour
in the dark
rushing to the stairs
and falling
to the landing
like a waterfall
like the dark blue slicker
a boston fern in wicker
waiting
stillness
the factory whistle
and in a degrees
climb
behind the eye
of a threshold
storm
the flakes
arrive
hazed in
behind the
mucus
the nurse in white
the oxygen tent
these years bleeding
broken like the shrill
of a shorebirds
climbing cry
higher and higher
a white bird
on white walls
tendrils of spring
hope
loose caught
in the gusts
streaming
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Ian.T
Wed, 2014-04-16 04:02
Steve
I liked this piece in its variety of feelings.
One thing are some of the tenses a little wrong;-
"back arch beneath the starch linen shirt"
Have read this a couple of times now and the rest seems excellent, Yours Ian.T
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Esker
Wed, 2014-04-16 10:03
arch..starch
removed..it reades, "back beneath the linen shirt"
the neck is the bridge
shoulder blades
the spine
like it hangs in our closets
our drapery of appearances..
arch starch and even the c with back the ck...che sound
rather k with the kuh sound
arch......a bridge...where either that freedom reigns or the
sigh of heaviness upon all..
keybridge
keystone
all my works have it
except for the works in progress
which are built like two archs that
run together to meet in the middle
to jump across the distance
the fast slowing or jagged flowing
beneath
glad you asked
i presume you are a technical
man from your background and mind
so you will feel this out in the works
and the more i give here
as a poet rather then mystery
is a guide of understanding
the simpler version would be to run
it simple
like
her back was arched and her clothes draped..
or danced..or clung..etc to her
the shirt...the tartan is reference to
catholic schooling
the rest of the poem about a mother
or her accident
the spring when if winter doesnt get us
then springs flus activity dislodge
and make present the weaknesses
protected over winter..held slow
come to life like the flowers
like the weather churning
alive
observance
actrion
scene change
a lot of my work is those things
i really should work in film
not that there is limitations to poetry
but its easier to just create visually
but the poetry is still the storyboard
of ideas..
leave it to me to even notice any
of these details anyway and try to put
it all into such few lines
in a way that is not just written
i like people who stand out
i know so many who have this
vibe about them
the double take
pull themselves up and strive
forward against all adversity
that kind of thing
survival thing
actually explaining this makes me
see the physical observances of
how it is....i like the keystone
idea olf the arch..
the half built bridge
truths..
thank you
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