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facade foretold
by bodin' eye
glimpsed looking
glass the depthful guise

the pressure twixt
that held us fast
on a hairline crack
that shatters fast

the falls
glimmering
ice
shower
in shiver steaming
spout spitting
like wounds
from an old house
shaking
in the turbulent
flaw
of wind seeker
soul weeper winds

and in the deep
pressed
a hand against
my heart

and started time
in reverse

alice
with the
glass in hand
finger touted
through out
through in

ecila
monosyllabic
like fingers
opening rune
poems
down
goose flesh
and healed
hones

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A good trip into those thought trains again, I liked this one though there was a hitch in one of the lines, here:-

the pressure twixt
that held us fast
on a hairline crack
that shatters fast.

It seemed that to use "Twixt" you wanted to compare two things yet the second thing didn't arrive. The flow was grand and this write was extra good.
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

aha twixt...

the "us"
that leads to more
in my other world head..

its a start though
glad you caught that one
Ian..

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When I was just a very young boy, I learned to speak by being with my Godfather.
He had a very broad accent of Wiltshire origins, the words tiz, twixt, casn't, and bist were my everyday talk, it was a lovely time of my life, but as you know travel and forces for 15 years corrected the accent, though I can still revert to the old talk.
I find your use of these words, a good change and they bring back the good past, Yours, Ian

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

thats all..

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