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I sit here as the music of the Isles
touches my soul
There racing as the silent tide
toward the shore are my feelings

Thoughts of things gone by
visions of things to come
Where are those voices
when I need them so

A comfort in knowing
That you and I loved them
Come sit a while, with me here
watch with me because I care.

The gentle flow of our thoughts
As they intertwine
Whisper of love and our before times
As they echo in our minds.

Tell softly of those secret days
Of loves remembered
Then talk of our joined ways
Where we lived as one

Give to me a taste of things to be
When my soul is set free
That time will no longer be
Different for you and me

Let us talk of friends we know
Why we cannot let them go
They will talk with us in the echoes of time
Fearing we would leave them behind

There on this beach secure
We can drift for evermore
That we send our thoughts out there
Beyond the reef away from shore

Stay a while I feel that I need
To talk to you of all these things
It is hard to find a place to begin
Just let me hear your thoughts again

I must rest now my little one
Here another day is begun
Always remember that I love you so
I see you here you'll never go.

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I just have a space to fill and as I listen to Hawaiian music it brings in another world that hovers in the background, Yours Ian . T Started three records ago
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its always a pleasure to read your works. This is no different. Thanks for sharing.

Alid

This shows you one way of being able to write.
Listening to music then just writing as the music goes through.
I am very lucky in that I can tap into many writes, I use to write for people I met outside in the evenings usually away from home and in the odd bar, though I must add I can only remember having too much to drink about twice in my life, it would make me sick, so as I don't like being sick I stopped drinking more than two drinks in an evening, then I would write on beer mats or joy of joys if paper was available and just let it flow, maybe the writes are not all good but the odd one shines through,
I still have the odd beer mat here that has writing on it.
You must find some place where you are comfortable, thanks for your visit I enjoyed talking to you,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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music, is it? So what were you listening when you write this piece?

Alid

The music of Hawaiian folk for this one most times I listen to music must be good at multi tasking lol
Thanks for your visit, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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I'm so busy these days I study so much
but it's always nice to come here
to rest a bit
your works are such inspiration to me
thanks ;)

Emina
Maybe it's better to stay completely within
as fire hides in metal
as water hides in rock.
Rumi

Thank you for your visit if there are any things you need help with just ask of us, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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but good
did u read Jess views on my
REFLECTION Poem
He mentions you gracefully

loved

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