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A Heart's Tale 2

Within the walls of a fortress,
a child wept bitter tears.
Unbearable was the loneliness,
haunting him over the years.

He saw love blooming around him
from the union of lovers' hearts
and the old desire returned to him,
whispering the beauty of his past

"I want to be free!" he screamed
but the walls of distrusts mocked him.
Cowardice reigned supreme
denying him, a child so weak

Kneeling on the floor, he faced the heavens,
pleading for a miracle to set him free

When it finally happened,
it took him by surprise
for his saviours were close to him,
people who never left his side

They knew there was still good in him,
one that has not been sullied by time,
thus they came with godspeed
to be his champions one more time.

They wield the bond of friendship,
love and hopes, long forgotten
to challenge the living fortress
which kept him imprisoned.

Love was their armour, courage was their steel
friendship was their weapon, prayer was their shield

Bold heroes charging forward,
determined to complete their mission.
With the magic of their sacred bond,
they crushed their enemy to emerge triumphant

As the walls cracked and crumbled,
a stubborn fear of hurt surfaced.
The fear of being left, unprotected,
of being hurt once again.

But a ray of hope banished his doubts
as he found himself among friends,
those who loved him in spite of his flaws
gave him strength to stand again.

Who would ever thought that one would be his mate,
when cupid's arrows found them locked in embrace,
that friendship would flourish to be a love so great
and he would find his life, blessed with grace...

Thus this heart's tale ended
with the triumph of love
over the shadows of the past
to begin a new tale again...

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Comments

A wonderful tale with lot of meaning embedded in the verses. It is a pleasure to read this.

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

Glad you enjoyed it. I seldom write two poems which are linked to each other. It was Ian's comments on the first one which gave me this idea. I'm thinking of writing a Renga next but that will take some time for research before I go ahead with it. Thanks for the visit and the comments.

Alid

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Glad you enjoyed it. I seldom write two poems which are linked together. It was Ian's comments on the first one which gave me this idea. I'm thinking of writing a Renga next but that will take some time for research before I go ahead with it. Thanks for the visit and the comments.

Alid

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