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At Your Side

You did not see me standing at your side
I wouldn’t talk as you were resting
That you had been crying as an oceans tide
Soft tears flowed that’s what called me in.

Now how do I start to heal these ills of yours?
There is no need for other physical beings
This Spirit of mine reached out to your shores
Now I can deal with your disrupted feelings.

You are a creature that is sure of what to do
a point of focus a Mother so very strong
That others cannot understand the real you
Now you struggle but know where you belong

I shall settle your thoughts with a blanket of love
The warmth of a soft evening, leaving an afterglow
They are but a thought away, not from an above
There in the gentle rest of all the friends you know

To rest your mind leaving turmoil behind,
just think of those outside of what you see
I worry not as I talk to their gentle minds
It’s a gift from those that forever will be.

Two monks, one yours, one mine, and Sadie
they help us see and feel so many things
Just remember there are more than three
There are a multitude of spiritual beings

Each are mainly hidden from our view
Many are waiting to help us you know
Just think and they are there for you
A pond, one pebble, in the middle throw

Tossed into the waters silver glow
Let your thoughts follow the rings
from the centre wave on wave will grow
there you will find all spiritual things

The driving force of all things known
For ever where all roads will meet
An energy pattern you are never alone
The greatest place to put Granddads seat

There are stories that I have told to you
The children, and teachers that always learn
Of their world and all the things they do
I have to live here, but it is a place I yearn.

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A write to let friends know that no matter what we will walk with them, an addition to the Advisor works, Yours, Ian.T
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this is an epigram , cause though strongly of love i get a sense of wisdom, and i feel as a pilgrim discovering the shores of his internal holy land, beautiful poetry and the place where all roads meet, is a festivity in black, right ian?

Thank you for your visit, this was a visit to a friend, but the distance is too far for a physical visit so there are other ways of travelling other than by aircraft etc:,
My teachers are as children, and can go where they please without fear of distance.
Thanks again, Yours Ian.T

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I love the rhyme and the love portrayed throughout the poem.I got this image that you are trying to help someone close to you like for example, your wife or your close friend. This is nicely done...Kudos, Ian.

Alid

As I said to Emeka in my reply, it is a way of travel that only needs thought, this was for a friend that is in another part of the world, the children I know let me stand with them in their teachings, it is another world, it depends on your beliefs or what you have been taught about the Spirit side of things.
Each of our religions has a spirit side they are all beautiful if only we were taught how to use tem properly..
Yours with many thanks, Ian.T

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Well I'm back for a while at least. This is a very heartfelt expression of support made more poignant for me since I know who it concerns. This is therefore not a poem I want to critique, only applaud. Sometimes words and their sentiments can become powerful healers.
My best wishes
Keith

I have not been to China, it is one place that I would love to go physically, but the years have grabbed at my body and the odd trip away from home has taken much from me.
I remember a little lady who was so beautiful visiting our school one day, this must have been in the mid 50's her name was Gladys Alwordy if I have spelt it right, she left an impression on me that I still hold, is she still remembered in China or has world politics left her out.
The film "The Inn of The Sixth Happiness" to me was a good story of her.
Not only this but the whole history of china and its people are very interesting..
Thanks for your visit it was great to see you here,
Yours as always Ian.T

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Yes indeed it is poignant and touching. I just would want to know why you have preferred "At Your Side" instead of "By Your Side"? Is it because of the spiritual connection?

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

To me I use "at your side", this to me is just being there without touching without the other person knowing sometimes yet they can be aware of a presence, giving a security without asking.
I would think that "by your side" is more physical, so in the context of the poem the former is used.
Or it can be just me and the way I use words.
Thank you and take care always,
Yours Ian.T

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Appreciate your explanation and I agree that in that context At your Side is more appropriate.

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

here in England we have at least 30 different ways, and accents when using words, many dialects form our small Island, many are constantly changing. from the queens English of the old TV presenters to now, it must be the same in your country. Good to have such a variety in life,
Yours Ian.T

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Ian i get why you said at your side

Even with my smaller range of words, I still have to play with them, next time I may change to the other one, lol, Take care fellow poet,
Yours Ian.T

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