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wither by corpus incentives

darting is much needed urinating
earth's wings sheds rustling leaves awaiting
choirs answering like sticks
cinnamon decapitated
flay over us
plaintive depths in tumor
the she-creature moved me
until like confetti
i drop pike irritability
summer of berth
distant shores from birth

forums herald vulnerability

a journey , the absolute inter-phase
begins meditation congeal dilute

institutions created for the empty yolk
lonely soul given a chance
denied of apocalypse twilight
dear light, your manifold
soon is a tomb of death

meeting the made investments unsure
leggings of cripple, numbered face
ushering distillation of chaste
recycle chitin clocks
wet nails for the day of wail

satchel of ashes in brim
gust and ground autumnal corpse

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
the beginning of the poem has two meanings , a surface meaning which is like summer to rebirth herself from rain that the whole season has awaited, still the deeper meaning is of a man making love to a woman[pike irritability], and the climax is also dual sided, bringing forth another form of inevitable existence a child born to this earth, the pleasure leads to the for sure certainty of the ends-meet of their union. leggings of cripple refer to all the uneven hands of the clock, the hour second and meaning hand, also numbered face refers to the clock. and life ends him in ashes
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Comments

can't really say that I grasped the imagery of your poem right from the onset except from your LAST FEW WORDS which u took time to explain.
But I can say that your choice of words is bold.

welcome to Neopoet.

respects.

WonderGolly

What I love most about POETS is how they write SADNESS with SUNSHINE on their face, caption RAIN with FALLEN EMBERS and paint TEARS using the colours of WATERFALLS:lol

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