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Foolhardy lovers Appreciated by Jess and ed by raj not many have read

Foolhardy lovers

They all fall in love
on Face Book
or any sites....
all those who so appear
are not themselves in reality...

many are the humming birds
some chasing living ghosts
some are mad in their musings
thinking them to be shadows

who and why

should they just fall in love
with creatures so strange
they will never meet ever
I say
that again and again

love abounds in hearts two
if one is known
another is new
but both should feel the urge
the desire
the instinct to fall in love
with just someone’s ink
in liquid or poetic form
whatever it may be

Love between strangers
is maddening
isn't it really....

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When he is bad he terrible, but when he is good he is brilliant.
My reading:
http://vocaroo.com/i/s0Wei63MiOip

cheers,
Jess
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your compliment
if it was meant to be so
Jess ....
without you I am like a Rose
without a stem of thorns
of what use !

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a compliment

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

and thankful
urs
pupil

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At last one of those grand pieces that we have waited so patiently for,
Then you question Jess on what he said "I love your imagery"
Come on it was sincere just say sorry and thank him for the compliment lol.
Well written young Bard lets have some more of these and broaden your experiences in writing of other facets of your life's Sojourn, Yours Ian.T

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

by you I ought to abide
Jess gladly
took my right side
and I cried
brilliant said he
!!!!!
thank thee

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I believe this is one of your better poems. I liked it...

if i may suggest some changes in stanza 2, it could be

many are the humming birds
some chasing living ghosts
some are mad in their musings
thinking them to be shadows

just a thought...

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

you know
I always accept
shall consider
we learn thanks friend raj

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