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Little Mouse
Little Mouse is hungry,
time to look for food.
He leaves for the kitchen
to find cheese to loot.
Thus he moves quickly,
passing by the fat cat,
who watches him silently,
ready to attack.
Once the deed is done,
he wants to go home
but his courage undone
crumbling like stone..
The cat is standing!
trouble approaching
Little Mouse squeaking
Scared, he starts running
His grip slipping,
his cheese falling
His heart breaking,
but he's not pausing
His belly grumbling,
Little Mouse is sad.
He is still starving
but his luck is bad..
Crying silently,
he wanders alone
before he knows it,
he's far from home..
There in the park,
he cries out in delight
when he finds a biscuit
and not a cat in his sight
Little Mouse returns home,
singing and dancing around,
celebrating the day
and the treasure he has found....
Comments
Ian.T
Thu, 2014-03-13 05:08
Alid
Just a tiny tweak on these two stanzas:-
As the cat growls,
he lets out a squeaks.
He flees for dear life
Little Mouse run quick!
In all the haste,
his cheese has fallen
but with the cat there,
he dares not return.
They seem to stop the flow of a good poem read it out loud and hear what I mean, Yours Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
alidzain
Thu, 2014-03-13 12:20
Ian
Done some editing. Tell me what you think.
Alid
raj
Thu, 2014-03-13 13:28
Alid
A nice story with imagery you have used,
raj (sublime_ocean)
alidzain
Thu, 2014-03-13 17:19
Thank you, Raj
Just trying out something new.
Alid