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"Another talk"

What shall I talk of, to you this evening?
Paltry little items to waste both our time's
Epic things to stir your shallow interest
No I just want to see you for what you are

What the hell do you want of me
Alright you need to know of my ways
That's a laugh as I can't relate to those
I think at an instants whim so what's next

Too much has passed my eyes to this day
To tell you in a few words, would fail both of us
You in your understanding of my ways,
and me in a feeling of being understated

Many things have been in my waking times,
the dream times I may have misunderstood
Were they part of my awareness or just a rest time?
Have you never wondered which is which?

Do you live in your awareness or in your dreams?
Can you tell the difference of these states,
where sometimes one is better, do we choose?
Shall I talk of reality or dreams to you.

Go think in your own space and then tell me,
how many are in your awakened state?
Do the takers of dreams scare your wake times,
now that I can drift into those spaces you have there.

Watch for me in those times where I can take you
Where you may ask will I be, in that open space
Dare you ask of me to treat you well in dreams,
it's too late, I am now in control just accept all.

Maybe I will be gentle with your mind,
or shift your thoughts to places you cannot find
I am the stealer of those souls that sleep
I may walk with you, but I now have your soul

If I let you wake today as that new sun rises
Will you remember me in there playing games
If you should not awake just remember,
that you are now a part of me always

I run hot or cold within your souls sleep
I capture your mind, sort thoughts things to keep
I will leave you as you read this piece in your wake,
think of me before the next sleep you take

Review Request (Intensity): 
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What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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Last few words: 
Watch out even in your dreams I can walk with you. LOL
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iannnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn you writ with wit

just a trip on the dark side, where the dream stealers live, LOL
Thanks for your visit,
Yours Ian.T

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This tips from brevity to humor in a breath, I really loved the wandering thought, of taking control of a situation be it even in dreams, There are some really outstanding lines and stanza's here I really enjoyed the read tonight.

This one seems to have pent up emotions bubbling beneath the surface...it maybe just me eh ? Or maybe there is another poem to follow?

love always Jayne x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

started out as a talk, then the dark side took over and let the stealer of souls come in.
Maybe a latent bad energy lurking there so take care when you sleep, lol
Could be a new Digit arriving ????
Yours as usual, Ian.T x

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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many interesting questions are posed within your poem. An overflow of food for thought. I like the way in which you ended it aand left it open to the reader

Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)

I was being quietly bad in this one ending up becoming part of the dark side and stealer of souls should you sleep lol.
Not sure how I can write such stuff, it must be a bad part of me sticking through some where.
Take care love to all, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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