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Taking the tears

Submitted by Edward nigma on Fri, 2021-10-01 22:19

As time took the tears
and threw them
through the years
finally falling into the future’s
fluorescent flames of fear .
Where everything
I hold deep and dear
suddenly starts to disappear.
Then that's when
my world came clear.
Revealing the reality
that I am alone.
Alone and
on my own.

Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Sat, 2021-10-02 10:16

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gives me a sense of sadness, knowing that you feel so alone. I imagine that you must have family and friends, but you aren't feeling the connection. keep writing and expressing yourself. Your works are read and appreciated. My only criticism, is that I don't know how you would throw tears. Maybe [dripping] them through the years, instead? ~ Geez.
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Edward nigma

Sat, 2021-10-02 11:26

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Thank you
For your criticism

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