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Rafaela #2

Rafaela as you see her now seated upon the sofa
Her soft body unveiling itself
Will be the most humanized portrait of the lot
And the most famous
Painted in the same rotund angular
Style her mistress will be known for
Yet with more depth and feeling
Less sharp and rigorous than
The dead eyed minxes that came before her

Emotion clearly shows in her face
A sadness in the eyes
A haughty acceptance
In her lips as if she’s
Doing something she once
Loved but now it’s killing her
To sit, pose and be painted
For hours on end while
Losing something of herself, of her heart
With each brush stroke and paint dab

A languorous slow death in a Parisian garret
With the somnolent summer air blowing
Breezily into autumn, all ochre and apricot tart
The tartness slowly turning the green gauzy moss upon the trees
Into the dead brown they shall soon become
Crackling beneath the feet of the busy bustling
Pre-war Parisians below lost in their own self-importance

While Rafaela waits for the final sigh of contentment as
The brush is laid down and her mistress looks up and
Over at her with gimlet green eyes, angling her
Blonde curled head toward the bedroom
indicating the commencement of the final act of the day

The ribbons that bound them now loosening more each day
To be finally tossed away, just when Rafaela needed them
Tightened most…understanding as she does now
They were never real, just an accoutrement
A means to an end all laid out
To serve what her mistress really loves: a blank canvas.

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what a model is thinking about while sitting for an artist! Surely, this is the universal theme. In the days and weeks that a model has sat for the artist, they are drawn together and many times, made it more about the affair and attachment for each other, than the painting or sculpting. However, once the project is done, the artist and object of his/her affection begins to see the end as something different. I applaud the thought and the answers. Simply marvelous and so evident as to where this was going. Very nice work! Welcome to Neopoet, I am looking forward to more of your work. ~ Geezer.
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The inspiration for this poem was taken from an actual painting. Thanks for the feedback, it's nice to be here!

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Thanks for the feedback. I'm glad you liked the poem and yes there will be more. And yes I do like Ferlinghetti.

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I love how this poem so smoothly paints such a rich texture of the time and place and all the emotional subtext of the model and painter. I really look forward to more of your work :-)

Thank you!!! I worked hard to get the imagery and tone of what I was trying to convey just right. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. I have in fact just published another poem if you are so inclined.

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Welcome to Neopoet CD! Glad you are here. Love this piece, and the last stanza was inspired - well done!

Cheers

Michael Anthony

Thank you! I'm pleased you enjoyed the poem.

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I saw a slice of this on IG and searched it up. Your language really set an atmosphere. Really enjoyed the read and hope to see more. Welcome to Neopoet

raffy

Thank you! I was going for a certain atmosphere with this poem and I'm glad it came through. I'm pleased you liked the poem. I have just posted another poem if you are interested. Thanks again for the feedback

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