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marvelous just marvy.....on joining a workshop

Submitted by lovedly on Tue, 2014-09-02 22:32

marvelous just marvy

Neopoets I shall join,
from an outstanding players
point of view
shall enter and see
what loved can do

I walk an isolated path yes
but success I can never beget
as Loved lives in this skin
misunderstood mostly

But I shall now begin
and
participate through thick and thin
just let me join in

Here I send my inner voice
to speak aloud
and hope you will not shout
again
my way

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

Comments

swikmiller

Tue, 2014-09-02 22:55

one fantastic poem and incredibly well-crafted. your changes in verb tense are spot-on and effective. your ability to write this great cry of self, sans punctuation -- I admire that!

lovedly

Tue, 2014-09-02 23:41

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I read yours maiden this morning I think

Now I have also taken the dramatic challenge
of Snowmans workshop
and have just now
posted my maiden contribution

.The punctuation ignored here were just by accident,
though as a poet I don't pay much attention
to either grammar or punctuation

Poetry is different to prose.
sans all but emotion
an innate creation
not by articulation ..

My opinion only
as I have been composing ///since past six decades

Many don't know here
what is a ''''decade''
mostly /many
still consider me
soil worth just a spade....
hope you won't
with your experience..

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mand

Wed, 2014-09-03 00:48

mand's picture
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Brilliant poem! - you hit the jackpot. Great that you've joined a workshop! :) :)

Go for it!

Love Mand xxx

lovedly

Wed, 2014-09-03 01:06

lovedly's picture

I have already posted in SNOWMAN'S workshop
do read
and guide ...help with any corrections
u feel
thanks in advance

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