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manifesto 1

Submitted by judyanne on Wed, 2012-04-18 10:46

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time is emotion
stitched within an illusion
named separation
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Structured: Eastern
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Editing - draft

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Candlewitch

Wed, 2012-04-18 12:14

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A significant message within your haiku! You packed alot of meaning into few words and lines. I have no suggestions, only a deep appreciation for the work.

always, Cat

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And reply in kind, thanks.

judyanne

Thu, 2012-04-19 22:49

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thanks so much for the supportive comments
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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MDT

Wed, 2012-04-18 14:31

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i love this, the less said the more room for thought...love it...thanks.

Peace love and harmony light the path we must take. - MDT

judyanne

Thu, 2012-04-19 22:50

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for the very kind comments
love judy

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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emogothgirl

Wed, 2012-04-18 22:10

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i just gained a lot more respect for you; i CANNOT write in haiku! so yay for you! i think it said just enough, nicely done.
always,
mag

judyanne

Thu, 2012-04-19 22:51

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that is a lovely thing to say
love judy

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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Cloudthings

Wed, 2012-04-18 23:31

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MDT said it perfectly... so much thinking rushed in where you used those few words to open doors & sweep passages clear.... just wonderful... still whirling with it!

Anni xx

Cheers
Anni

My dear friend always told me "Water the seeds of joy first"

judyanne

Thu, 2012-04-19 22:52

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so glad it hit a spot
love judy
xxxxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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Roscoe Lane

Thu, 2012-04-19 03:16

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Don't write Haiku's, but the way this glides amongst the brain cells is perfect. Regards Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

judyanne

Thu, 2012-04-19 22:52

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love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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Nordic cloud

Thu, 2012-04-19 10:51

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This is so...so...isn't it ?
A fascinating evocative set of words
that says something in a new way so well judyanne

a gem.

annanya.x

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

judyanne

Thu, 2012-04-19 22:53

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thank you very much for the supportife comments
love judyanne
xxxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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loved

Thu, 2012-04-19 11:14

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nice haiku
filled with emotion
no commotion
no illusion

loved

judyanne

Thu, 2012-04-19 22:54

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xxx
hugs
judy

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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loved

Fri, 2012-04-20 01:08

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some more comments
would love from you

loved

pleiades

Fri, 2012-04-20 10:05

i usually can't stand these kind
of writes ...they often seem to be a single thought masquerading
as something poetic

however!
this write stopped me in my tracks

i read it, felt i'd just read some kind of profound truth. this write
impacted upon me, and for some strange reason, makes me think
of death
but not in any morbid, creepy way ... just makes me think
of the ultimate separation

terrific write
loved it

cheers
p

judyanne

Sat, 2012-04-21 00:07

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lovely to see you
thank you very much for the awesome comment
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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Nordic cloud

Tue, 2012-05-22 15:44

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Just had a thought...

You don't know its whole
until it is gone.

annanya with love.

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

judyanne

Mon, 2012-05-28 09:50

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we don't know it is there
until it is gone
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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judyanne

Mon, 2012-05-28 09:48

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then there's

fool is emotion
poured into a decision
to separate time

love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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judyanne

Mon, 2012-08-20 01:13

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how strange - i'm sure that you already commented on this - see my reply above, and i can remember that you wrote a senryu to prompt the one i did in the reply... or was that another mark who has gone? - i could’ve sworn it was you

and your comment has gone
i wonder what happened there

anyway i really appreciate the supportive comment
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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