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Leaves of autumn.....Ian and Loved's duet

Ian and Loved’s duet*

*Colours of autumn floating by,
happiness spreading,
as a blanket on the ground
Feelings floating gently,
touching those in dreams
walk with these happy people
thinking that if winter should come
then spring is not far behind.

lovely thoughtful myriads kind
we all have in mind

so we all dream of lovelier
Ah! Yes so it seems...
hence most of the time
we all day dream...

beautiful ones flowers like...
bring music to our soul...
and
we feel complete and whole...

one seems to be reaching
a final goal..
in the garden of life
as all of us walk alone...

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A nice seasonal poem - that can also be applied to life!

This poem gave me a smile!

Love Mand xxxx

I compare

life with seasons

intelligence with common sense

humans with animals

and
rivers with life's sojourn

we come to go
to merge with the bigger one

then resurrect as vapours
back to heaven
after life goes passed
half past seven

author comment

This rang out as a piece written for a paper, a description of the things you see out there.
Now excuse me I will take the first Stanza and see where we see differently:-

Beautiful colours in autumn
bring happiness to so many
the ones in a dream
make people happy
to feel that if winter comes
can spring be far behind

Colours of Autumn floating by,
happiness spreading,
as a blanket on the ground.
Feelings floating gently,
touching those in dreams
Walk with these happy people
Thinking that if Winter should come
Then Spring is not far behind.

See we write so differently, but I did think that there was a shortage of feelings in your write.
Take care young Bard,
Yours Ian

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

compare
so with your lovelier verse
my poetry I repair

AND HAVE PERFORCE TO ADD

Ian and Loved's duet
*Colours of Autumn floating by,
happiness spreading,
as a blanket on the ground.
Feelings floating gently,
touching those in dreams
Walk with these happy people
Thinking that if Winter should come
Then Spring is not far behind.

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