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Hephaestus And Prometheus

Submitted by C. Wolff on Sun, 2022-08-07 01:40

Prometheus,
Oh temple brother of mine,
Somber omen has been fulfilled,
Within my tearful eyes,
A pitiful plight ails you,
I have become your inflictor of torment,
Your eternal hate shall haunt me,
Can you ever forgive me,

Prometheus speaks,
I have placed upon my scales,
My heart which is filled with brotherly love for you,
And it has certainly outweighed my hate,
So fear not,
Your chains shall be a comfort to me,
As they are from you,
Forever with me,
Oh brother of mine.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Not actively editing
Contest: 
Neopoem Of The Week Contest August 7th to August 13th
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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RoseBlack

Mon, 2022-08-08 18:53

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A mythological demonstration of the sibling relationship as far back as stories are told. A good take on the story, excellent flow and use of language. I wouldn't change a thing.

:)

~RoseBlack~

C. Wolff

Mon, 2022-08-08 20:46

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thx!

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Jackweb

Fri, 2022-08-12 00:40

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I felt it all around me. Poignant lines, emotive, heart rendering...

The sweetness of creating an environment by creating a wonderful rhythm from sound to sound has emerged in the poetic description of his mind in an aesthetic sense. Thought, imagination deserves praise.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

Ray Whitaker

Fri, 2022-08-12 14:33

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It is all to easy for we modern-day folk to ignore the age-old wisdom...

I like the way you structured the poem. The eight line stanzas are fulfilling of what your intent is to show. Tough subject, IMHO.

I think I would join S2L9 with the previous line, as the second stanza is actually a nine line one.

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