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Age (prose poem)

Submitted by quillsveinback on Thu, 2014-11-20 22:54

A paper moth strung from a candy gloss vellum embossed with micro pastel flowers and autographed library ISBS scanned in constellate ions of hypnopomp.

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Esker

Mon, 2014-11-24 03:32

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scanner.....adjust..file..forget...
like eyes in the mall
on the bus
love...
see what we think we like to want
and get it...
does it make happiness
or is it just another hypnotist
showering us with praise
to sweep into the collection

Love the Hypnopomp line
excellent!

thank you!

quillsveinback

Mon, 2014-11-24 23:07

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You are a discerning commentator

JTA

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zebra

Tue, 2018-12-25 06:05

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Im reading your surreal poems with hungry eyes, digesting, my brain is pregnant with standing ovulations ;O

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