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Barbara Writes
Fri, 2012-08-24 00:57
Hi everyone
I am happy to start "Eternal Renga" I have posted the first three verses to start things off.
Any who wants can post the next two verses. Then another the next three, as so forth until all of Neopoet members have added a verse that truly results in a great Neopoet poem.
Please add you verses here on the workshop and not on the stream. All verses will be submitted to the stream as one poem.
Where world powers clash
the heart of insomniacs
overcome hereby dreams
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author commentChina Blue
Sun, 2012-08-26 18:19
Barbara
So are we then to continue the thought of the verse just posted I am guessing this would be the case. Do we go in order or just jump in with a verse
Chrys
Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)
Barbara Writes
Sun, 2012-08-26 19:42
you are correct on both question.
just jump in add yours and the next person jump in add theirs and so on. whether it be an haiku, senyru, or 2 line verse. whatever is called for.
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author commentBarbara Writes
Sun, 2012-08-26 19:45
you are correct Mark
drop the here and i'm good. we keep each other straight.
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author commentChina Blue
Sun, 2012-08-26 19:22
#3
Where world powers clash
the heart of insomniacs
overcome here by dreams
Peace was never in the plan
Even with the simple clans
Yet they flock
like moths to a flame
they too
will meet the same end
Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)
Barbara Writes
Sun, 2012-08-26 19:48
I like these verses Chrys
if you could make it 3 lines of Haiku or Senyru that would be great.
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author commentBarbara Writes
Sun, 2012-08-26 20:19
thanks Mark
reposting as you add verses and revise it is good. it keeps us up to speed and make it easier for the next person to find where are in the stream of things.
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author commentscribbler
Sun, 2012-08-26 21:31
hi
for who can find peace
when both thoughts and battles rage
among hearth and kin ?
Barbara Writes
Mon, 2012-08-27 00:07
thanks
Stan your senyru is right on count.
Thanks Mark glad you are putting them togeher and resubmitting. You seem to be having fun at this online poetry table.
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author commentChina Blue
Mon, 2012-08-27 08:40
where world powers clash
where world powers clash
the heart of insomniacs
overcome by dreams
peace was never in the plan
even with the simple clans
for who can find peace
when both thoughts and battles rage
among hearth and kin ?
mostly we learn from parents
what is it the child learns then?
no one lights their way
in this world darkened by storms
unknown right from wrong
(chrys)
Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)
Barbara Writes
Mon, 2012-08-27 09:31
Thanks Chrys
nice senyru right on count
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author commentjudyanne
Mon, 2012-08-27 09:27
hi barbara - add me in xx
where world powers clash
the heart of insomniacs
overcome by dreams
peace was never in the plan
even with the simple clans
for who can find peace
when both thoughts and battles rage
among hearth and kin ?
mostly we learn from parents
what is it the child learns then?
no one lights their way
in this world darkened by storms
unknown right from wrong
fear with hate insidious
learned from lightning strikes long past
.
love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
Barbara Writes
Mon, 2012-08-27 09:38
thanks for joining
Ill add you now
nice one
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author commentthemoonman
Mon, 2012-08-27 11:21
Hey ..
Might I join in ?
where world powers clash
the heart of insomniacs
overcome by dreams
peace was never in the plan
even with the simple clans
for who can find peace
when both thoughts and battles rage
among hearth and kin ?
mostly we learn from parents
what is it the child learns then?
no one lights their way
in this world darkened by storms
unknown right from wrong
fear with hate insidious
learned from lightning strikes long past
and in soggy dreams
or breathing the fog between
there is room for all
Richard
Ian.T
Mon, 2012-08-27 11:30
More
where world powers clash
the heart of insomniacs
overcome by dreams
peace was never in the plan
even with the simple clans
for who can find peace
when both thoughts and battles rage
among hearth and kin ?
mostly we learn from parents
what is it the child learns then?
no one lights their way
in this world darkened by storms
unknown right from wrong
fear with hate insidious
learned from lightning strikes long past
and in soggy dreams
or breathing the fog between
there is room for all
I shall search loves memories
I know you are safe inside
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
China Blue
Mon, 2012-08-27 23:27
where world powers clash
where world powers clash
the heart of insomniacs
overcome by dreams
peace was never in the plan
even with the simple clans
for who can find peace
when both thoughts and battles rage
among hearth and kin ?
mostly we learn from parents
what is it the child learns then?
no one lights their way
in this world darkened by storms
unknown right from wrong
fear with hate insidious
learned from lightning strikes long past
and in soggy dreams
or breathing the fog between
there is room for all
I shall search loves memories
I know you are safe inside
.Still some will remain oblivious
others run and hide
but all will one day be called to account
for the part they have played
in this game of life
Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)
Barbara Writes
Tue, 2012-08-28 01:06
Wow i see yall just doing this
thanks i'm glad to see Richard and Ian verses, they are right on counts.
a Neopoet Poem in the making collaborated by all members.
wonderful
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author commentBarbara Writes
Tue, 2012-08-28 01:07
Renga Neopoet Poem
where world powers clash
the heart of insomniacs
overcome by dreams
peace was never in the plan
even with the simple clans
for who can find peace
when both thoughts and battles rage
among hearth and kin ?
mostly we learn from parents
what is it the child learns then?
no one lights their way
in this world darkened by storms
unknown right from wrong
fear with hate insidious
learned from lightning strikes long past
and in soggy dreams
or breathing the fog between
there is room for all
I shall search loves memories
I know you are safe inside
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author commentIan.T
Wed, 2012-08-29 03:13
Renga Neopoet Poem
where world powers clash
the heart of insomniacs
overcome by dreams
peace was never in the plan
even with the simple clans
for who can find peace
when both thoughts and battles rage
among hearth and kin ?
mostly we learn from parents
what is it the child learns then?
no one lights their way
in this world darkened by storms
unknown right from wrong
fear with hate insidious
learned from lightning strikes long past
and in soggy dreams
or breathing the fog between
there is room for all
I shall search loves memories
I know you are safe inside
Remember the dreams
Of many new vistas seen
There to be with you
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Barbara Writes
Wed, 2012-08-29 10:43
Ian
thanks those verse are perfect
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author commentIan.T
Wed, 2012-08-29 03:17
Barbara
Just trying to steer this away from the dark side that can come in later as night falls, I am not sure where all the others are it only takes a few minutes to write surly,
Yours Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Barbara Writes
Wed, 2012-08-29 10:46
Ian
thanks they are coming. i am inviting all the members one by one to participate, so there is no time limit .just have fun
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author commentBarbara Writes
Wed, 2012-08-29 10:49
Mark
thanks, just beautiful verses
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author commentRula
Fri, 2012-08-31 15:18
can i still join dear Barbra? i'll try my best
Thank you
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Barbara Writes
Fri, 2012-08-31 15:56
of course
you're in ill put your name in now.
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author commentWilliam Saint George
Sat, 2012-09-01 07:42
I added one more link to the chain.
where world powers clash
the heart of insomniacs
overcome by dreams
peace was never in the plan
even with the simple clans
for who can find peace
when both thoughts and battles rage
among hearth and kin?
mostly we learn from parents
what is it the child learns then?
no one lights their way
in this world darkened by storms
unknown right from wrong
fear with hate insidious
learned from lightning strikes long past
and in soggy dreams
or breathing the fog between
there is room for all
I shall search loves memories
I know you are safe inside
Remember the dreams
Of many new vistas seen
There to be with you
hidden mountainside cabin
hearth warming conversation
shelter from unseen
solace of the leeward face
by the fire side
No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot
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Barbara Writes
Sat, 2012-09-01 13:13
Thanks William
thanks for submitting
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author commentscribbler
Sat, 2012-09-01 16:06
hello
meanwhile fierce storms rage otside
buffeting our private world
Barbara Writes
Mon, 2012-09-03 10:45
Mark
thanks nice one
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author commentBarbara Writes
Mon, 2012-09-03 10:45
Mark
thanks nice one
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author commentweirdelf
Sun, 2012-09-02 23:16
my turn
where world powers clash
the heart of insomniacs
overcome by dreams
peace was never in the plan
even with the simple clans
for who can find peace
when both thoughts and battles rage
among hearth and kin?
mostly we learn from parents
what is it the child learns then?
no one lights their way
in this world darkened by storms
unknown right from wrong
fear with hate insidious
learned from lightning strikes long past
and in soggy dreams
or breathing the fog between
there is room for all
I shall search loves memories
I know you are safe inside
remember the dreams
of many new vistas seen
there to be with you
hidden mountainside cabin
hearth warming conversation
shelter from unseen
solace of the leeward face
by the fire side
meanwhile fierce storms rage outside
buffeting our private world
inner sunshine glow
eyes at steamy window peer
oblivious mood
so we peer and fear what's there
until we simply must act
cheers,
Jess
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'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
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Barbara Writes
Mon, 2012-09-03 10:47
Thanks Jess
nicely done
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author commentjudyanne
Mon, 2012-09-03 11:02
me?
where world powers clash
the heart of insomniacs
overcome by dreams
peace was never in the plan
even with the simple clans
for who can find peace
when both thoughts and battles rage
among hearth and kin?
mostly we learn from parents
what is it the child learns then?
no one lights their way
in this world darkened by storms
unknown right from wrong
fear with hate insidious
learned from lightning strikes long past
and in soggy dreams
or breathing the fog between
there is room for all
I shall search loves memories
I know you are safe inside
remember the dreams
of many new vistas seen
there to be with you
hidden mountainside cabin
hearth warming conversation
shelter from unseen
solace of the leeward face
by the fire side
meanwhile fierce storms rage outside
buffeting our private world
inner sunshine glow
eyes at steamy window peer
oblivious mood
so we peer and fear what's there
until we simply must act
set for a new dream
insomniac heart awake
venture to the storm
love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
Barbara Writes
Wed, 2012-09-05 22:49
thanks Mark
coming nicely
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author commentBarbara Writes
Mon, 2012-09-03 21:36
Judy
thanks, really nice one
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author commentBlueDemon77
Mon, 2012-09-03 23:38
I love the way this is happening!
Could I please join Barbara?
Ron BlueDemon77
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"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."
The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath
Barbara Writes
Wed, 2012-09-05 22:50
Ron
you are in. i've added you.
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author commentweirdelf
Wed, 2012-09-05 23:04
What do you say to this idea?
We are approaching 50 lines which is 20 verses, i think, lets publish it on the Stream there, but without a break, the Renga continues eternal?
It might just attract more participants. I am loving this!
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
Barbara Writes
Thu, 2012-09-06 06:54
Jess
I think it's a great idea. Would you like the honor of publishing this. I have a copy of all verses and names in my notes i'll post final here with names of all who participated at bottom.
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author commentIan.T
Thu, 2012-09-06 03:08
Newdy one
where world powers clash
the heart of insomniacs
overcome by dreams
peace was never in the plan
even with the simple clans
for who can find peace
when both thoughts and battles rage
among hearth and kin?
mostly we learn from parents
what is it the child learns then?
no one lights their way
in this world darkened by storms
unknown right from wrong
fear with hate insidious
learned from lightning strikes long past
and in soggy dreams
or breathing the fog between
there is room for all
I shall search loves memories
I know you are safe inside
remember the dreams
of many new vistas seen
there to be with you
hidden mountainside cabin
hearth warming conversation
shelter from unseen
solace of the leeward face
by the fire side
meanwhile fierce storms rage outside
buffeting our private world
inner sunshine glow
eyes at steamy window peer
oblivious mood
so we peer and fear what's there
until we simply must act
set for a new dream
insomniac heart awake
venture to the storm
tangled up in tree branches
lightning strike blows me away
Timeless energy
Seeking out the point of life
Feeds my wayward soul 06-09-12
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Barbara Writes
Thu, 2012-09-06 07:00
Ian
thanks nice one
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author commentIan.T
Thu, 2012-09-06 03:36
Pressed enter button twice
Duplicate La La, Yours, Sparrow
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So find more reasons to believe in others..
Ian.T
Thu, 2012-09-06 03:37
Thanks Mark
I fail to understand why it takes so long to extend this great write we are seeing.
It took me a couple of minutes to see what the theme was doing and thento write another piece to fit in or to push this on a little.
I was thinking of the tree of life that had been hit in your last stanza but thought we could be there a little more gradually, Yours Ian.T
PS:- The small pieces of this type of poetry are 36 stanzas long but some go on for as long as the one sitting in the chair says so.
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Barbara Writes
Thu, 2012-09-06 07:25
Final draft
Neopoet Renga #1
where world powers clash
the heart of insomniacs
overcome by dreams
peace was never in the plan
even with the simple clans
for who can find peace
when both thoughts and battles rage
among hearth and kin ?
mostly we learn from parents
what is it the child learns then?
no one lights their way
in this world darkened by storms
unknown right from wrong
fear with hate insidious
learned from lightning strikes long past
and in soggy dreams
or breathing the fog between
there is room for all
I shall search loves memories
I know you are safe inside
remember the dreams
of many new vistas seen
there to be with you
hidden mountainside cabin
hearth warming conversation
shelter from unseen
solace of the leeward face
by the fire side
meanwhile fierce storms rage outside
buffeting our private world
inner sunshine glow
eyes at steamy window peer
oblivious mood
so we peer and fear what's there
until we simply must act
set for a new dream
insomniac heart awake
venture to the storm
tangled up in tree branches
lightning strike blows me away
timeless energy
seeking out the point of life
feeds my wayward soul
Barbara
Mark
Stan
Chrys
Judy
Richard
Ian
William
Jess
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author commentBarbara Writes
Thu, 2012-09-06 07:19
hi
everybody is listed in the order of their first verse. Thanks for making this a continual success.
ok I think once we publish this as Neopoet Renga #1 we can continue with Neopoet Renga #2 and continue adding verses with a different theme based on who writes the first stanza. Would you Mark like the honor of writing the first haiku for this one.
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author commentBarbara Writes
Thu, 2012-09-06 08:03
lol thanks Mark
a wonderful first haiku
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author commentRula
Thu, 2012-09-06 07:53
hello, its just me
holding our sweet creamy dreams
Let them not shatter on floor
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Barbara Writes
Thu, 2012-09-06 08:04
Hi Rula
thanks nice addition
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author commentBarbara Writes
Thu, 2012-09-06 08:58
New
Neopoet Renga #2
Summer storms have passed
autumn is on the doorstep
falling leaves arrive
Holding our sweet creamy dreams
let them not shatter on floor
Trust dreams quiescent
muse remaining autumn scene
more timely imbue
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author commentBarbara Writes
Sun, 2012-09-09 21:06
Thanks Mark
October fest drawing closer
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author commentIan.T
Sun, 2012-09-09 04:33
Hi just passing by
Neopoet Renga #2
summer storms have passed
autumn is on the doorstep
falling leaves arrive
holding our sweet creamy dreams
let them not shatter on floor
trust dreams quiescent
muse remaining autumn scene
more timely imbue
dreams of cluttered entrances
pumpkin head scarecrows, cobwebs
Meadows glowing gold
Harvest moon drifts slowly by
Sunsets of our dreams
Cool evenings sweet serenade
Children kick the fallen leaves
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Barbara Writes
Sun, 2012-09-09 21:08
Thanks Ian
I love kicking hose autumn leaves
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author commentBarbara Writes
Mon, 2012-09-10 06:31
Mark
innocence is golden among the autumn leaves. a sweet one, seems to be a typo in the 2nd line.
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author commentBarbara Writes
Mon, 2012-09-10 06:41
newbie
summer storms have passed
autumn is on the doorstep
falling leaves arrive
holding our sweet creamy dreams
let them not shatter on floor
trust dreams quiescent
muse remaining autumn scene
more timely imbue
dreams of cluttered entrances
pumpkin head scarecrows, cobwebs
meadows glowing gold
marvest moon drifts slowly by
sunsets of our dreams
cool evenings sweet serenade
children kick the fallen leaves
adolescents roll
windbreakers breaking dry leaves
innocent first kiss
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author commentIan.T
Mon, 2012-09-10 07:34
Barbara
You didn't copy this by typing it all out did you???
I notice that my Harvest has become a Mavest lol.
All you need to do is Copy and paste..
Do you need any help with these bits???
Take care yours as always, Ian.T
PS:- Sorry I thought that it was you my dear lady that had retyped the whole thing I shall go to the corner..xx
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
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Mon, 2012-09-10 07:39
Mark
If you copy and paste to word or Notebook you can add your Stanzas and then copy and paste back with the changes without having to retype all those words.lol
Take care great to see your Stanzas here, Yours Ian.T
PS:- Also I have my Neopoet at 164% enlarged it is easy on the eyes, did you know that on the right side you can plus the size to suit your eyes, almost sounds poetic LOL
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Barbara Writes
Mon, 2012-09-10 08:59
Mark
my eyes too are shot, as large print is blurred at this point.
I prefer to CAP the first letter of the first line of the verses only, yes
though its not that important, i think it reads better.
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author commentjudyanne
Mon, 2012-09-10 08:59
although can i just say barb?
haiku etc don't usually use any capitals except for proper nouns
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
Barbara Writes
Mon, 2012-09-10 09:03
okay
i didnt realize that. since this is a lengthy poem of Haikus and Tankas, i figure the first letter of each verse might read better, though its not that big of a deal.
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author commentBarbara Writes
Mon, 2012-09-10 09:06
repaste new
summer storms have passed
autumn is on the doorstep
falling leaves arrive
holding our sweet creamy dreams
let them not shatter on floor
trust dreams quiescent
muse remaining autumn scene
more timely imbue
dreams of cluttered entrances
pumpkin head scarecrows, cobwebs
meadows glowing gold
harvest moon drifts slowly by
sunsets of our dreams
cool evenings sweet serenade
children kick the fallen leaves
adolescents roll
windbreakers breaking dry leaves
innocent first kiss
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author commentBlueDemon77
Mon, 2012-09-10 11:12
Glad to make it. It breaks my heart I didn't make Renga 1
summer storms have passed
autumn is on the doorstep
falling leaves arrive
holding our sweet creamy dreams
let them not shatter on floor
trust dreams quiescent
muse remaining autumn scene
more timely imbue
dreams of cluttered entrances
pumpkin head scarecrows, cobwebs
meadows glowing gold
harvest moon drifts slowly by
sunsets of our dreams
cool evenings sweet serenade
children kick the fallen leaves
adolescents roll
windbreakers breaking dry leaves
innocent first kiss
youthful heat among the leaves
and harvest moons passion pink
October winds loom
with spirits same through ages
sow and harvest true
to each glowing face anew
the ancient song is played
Ron
Blue Demon77
"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."
The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath
Barbara Writes
Mon, 2012-09-10 15:37
thanks Ron
Nice verses. i see you playing catch up with these three verses lol.
one tiny thing the last two line are great but the last lines have 6 syllables rathere than 7 . easy fix.
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author commentBarbara Writes
Mon, 2012-09-10 13:11
nicely done Mark
you went right into a song.
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author commentBarbara Writes
Mon, 2012-09-10 14:07
lol
i wont
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author commentDalton
Mon, 2012-09-10 14:57
Hi Barbara
Please where are the other poems in this workshop. Are they on a specific part of the site or on the normal stream?
John
Barbara Writes
Tue, 2012-09-11 02:55
Hi Dalton
Its a single poem. you just add your line, copy and paste the whole poem in your comment section. or just your verses and ill do it.
here it is just add your verse to the bottom. two line or haiku , senyru.
summer storms have passed
autumn is on the doorstep
falling leaves arrive
holding our sweet creamy dreams
let them not shatter on floor
trust dreams quiescent
muse remaining autumn scene
more timely imbue
dreams of cluttered entrances
pumpkin head scarecrows, cobwebs
meadows glowing gold
harvest moon drifts slowly by
sunsets of our dreams
cool evenings sweet serenade
children kick the fallen leaves
adolescents roll
windbreakers breaking dry leaves
innocent first kiss
youthful heat among the leaves
and harvest moons passion pink
summer storms have passed
autumn is on the doorstep
falling leaves arrive
holding our sweet creamy dreams
let them not shatter on floor
trust dreams quiescent
muse remaining autumn scene
more timely imbue
dreams of cluttered entrances
pumpkin head scarecrows, cobwebs
meadows glowing gold
harvest moon drifts slowly by
sunsets of our dreams
cool evenings sweet serenade
children kick the fallen leaves
adolescents roll
windbreakers breaking dry leaves
innocent first kiss
youthful heat among the leaves
and harvest moons passion pink
October winds loom
with spirits same through ages
sow and harvest true
to each glowing face anew
the ancient song is playing
love the way you feel
loving the way I'm feeling
let love take us there
where sorrows have not a place
where filicity prevails
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author commentBarbara Writes
Mon, 2012-09-10 15:40
Hi Ron
i'm just waiting for you to correct the last line syllable count we are rolling forward.
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author commentRula
Mon, 2012-09-10 15:45
summer storms have passed
summer storms have passed
autumn is on the doorstep
falling leaves arrive
holding our sweet creamy dreams
let them not shatter on floor
trust dreams quiescent
muse remaining autumn scene
more timely imbue
dreams of cluttered entrances
pumpkin head scarecrows, cobwebs
meadows glowing gold
harvest moon drifts slowly by
sunsets of our dreams
cool evenings sweet serenade
children kick the fallen leaves
adolescents roll
windbreakers breaking dry leaves
innocent first kiss
youthful heat among the leaves
and harvest moons passion pink
October winds loom
with spirits same through ages
sow and harvest true
to each glowing face anew
the ancient song is played
love the way you feel
loving the way I'm feeling
let love take us there
where sorrows have not a place
where filicity prevails
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Barbara Writes
Mon, 2012-09-10 15:36
thanks Rula
nice one i like it
your syllable count is off by one on both lines
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author commentRula
Mon, 2012-09-10 15:47
Better now
Better now?
off to the bed..zzzzzz
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Barbara Writes
Mon, 2012-09-10 16:50
Thanks Rula
nice one
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author commentBlueDemon77
Tue, 2012-09-11 01:09
Amendment- Ron
summer storms have passed
autumn is on the doorstep
falling leaves arrive
holding our sweet creamy dreams
let them not shatter on floor
trust dreams quiescent
muse remaining autumn scene
more timely imbue
dreams of cluttered entrances
pumpkin head scarecrows, cobwebs
meadows glowing gold
harvest moon drifts slowly by
sunsets of our dreams
cool evenings sweet serenade
children kick the fallen leaves
adolescents roll
windbreakers breaking dry leaves
innocent first kiss
youthful heat among the leaves
and harvest moons passion pink
October winds loom
with spirits same through ages
sow and harvest true
to each glowing face anew
the ancient song is playing
love the way you feel
loving the way I'm feeling
let love take us there
where sorrows have not a place
where filicity prevails
Blue Demon77
"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."
The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath
Ian.T
Tue, 2012-09-11 03:09
Ron
Completely threw me there as I syllable check all lines and your:-
where filicity prevails kept registering 3, LOL
I checked my Oxford and other books on the spelling and just couldn't find Filicity anywhere, all I had to do was put in for normal spell check.
There it was as bold as a brass monkey "Felicity" now all is well just a tiny typo, damn..
Good write there, the Renga is coming on we had a large fall of Leaves in there lol but it is fun, kicking up, breaking up, then making up, what a variety in so few lines.
Take care out there, Yours Ian.T
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Tue, 2012-09-11 05:36
Sorry Ian
that's my fault
The last two lines are mine . Ron had an incorrect syllable count somewhere else
but these were really mine.I did min. before I sleep and this is the result . Never shall I
rush things again.
I hope you have forgotten about it now and that you're having a true felicity :)
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Ian.T
Tue, 2012-09-11 07:07
Rula
Nothing to be sorry about that word as many I have to look up.
Lovely to see your Stanzas in this Renga they are fun, and some of the chatter that comes in the comments is fun also.
I always have a lovely day, as I have many things around me that are really beautiful, friends poets and my hobbies keep me busy from 7am until just after 12 midnight, I do the shopping and many things. and have lovely flowers all over the place. what more can I ask. ???
Life is a grand place to learn, you enjoy each moment, Yours Ian.T
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Barbara Writes
Tue, 2012-09-11 02:47
A nice song
Thanks Ron, Mark, Rula
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author commentloved
Tue, 2012-09-11 05:50
SRY
thanks it was a real intrusion
and some poet accused me
so i quit by saying
sorry by me
you may wipe out .....as its not in sync....
loved
Barbara Writes
Tue, 2012-09-11 03:10
Loved
Make it a haiku, senyru or two line verse following the theme of the last verse and it'll sync.
summer storms have passed
autumn is on the doorstep
falling leaves arrive
holding our sweet creamy dreams
let them not shatter on floor
trust dreams quiescent
muse remaining autumn scene
more timely imbue
dreams of cluttered entrances
pumpkin head scarecrows, cobwebs
meadows glowing gold
harvest moon drifts slowly by
sunsets of our dreams
cool evenings sweet serenade
children kick the fallen leaves
adolescents roll
windbreakers breaking dry leaves
innocent first kiss
youthful heat among the leaves
and harvest moons passion pink
October winds loom
with spirits same through ages
sow and harvest true
to each glowing face anew
the ancient song is playing
love the way you feel
loving the way I'm feeling
let love take us there
where sorrows have not a place
where filicity prevails
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author commentIan.T
Tue, 2012-09-11 07:10
Loved
The words you wrote were great, I think I PM'd you about the format I hope that you will resume your participation in this Renga it was great to see you there, have a great day young Bard, Yours Ian.T
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judyanne
Tue, 2012-09-11 07:21
me now
summer storms have passed
autumn is on the doorstep
falling leaves arrive
holding our sweet creamy dreams
let them not shatter on floor
trust dreams quiescent
muse remaining autumn scene
more timely imbue
dreams of cluttered entrances
pumpkin head scarecrows, cobwebs
meadows glowing gold
harvest moon drifts slowly by
sunsets of our dreams
cool evenings sweet serenade
children kick the fallen leaves
adolescents roll
windbreakers breaking dry leaves
innocent first kiss
youthful heat among the leaves
and harvest moons passion pink
October winds loom
with spirits same through ages
sow and harvest true
to each glowing face anew
the ancient song is playing
love the way you feel
loving the way I'm feeling
let love take us there
where sorrows have not a place
where filicity prevails
but falls harvest calls
Demeter's sorrowful search
season of decline
judy
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
Rula
Tue, 2012-09-11 12:53
Beautiful dear Judy and all
summer storms have passed
autumn is on the doorstep
falling leaves arrive
holding our sweet creamy dreams
let them not shatter on floor
trust dreams quiescent
muse remaining autumn scene
more timely imbue
dreams of cluttered entrances
pumpkin head scarecrows, cobwebs
meadows glowing gold
harvest moon drifts slowly by
sunsets of our dreams
cool evenings sweet serenade
children kick the fallen leaves
adolescents roll
windbreakers breaking dry leaves
innocent first kiss
youthful heat among the leaves
and harvest moons passion pink
October winds loom
with spirits same through ages
sow and harvest true
to each glowing face anew
the ancient song is playing
love the way you feel
loving the way I'm feeling
let love take us there
where sorrows have not a place
where felicity prevails
but falls harvest calls
Demeter's sorrowful search
season of decline
As hibernation soon wears
our mother nature beauties
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Barbara Writes
Tue, 2012-09-11 17:06
Rula
thanks
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author commentBarbara Writes
Sat, 2012-09-15 02:48
Mark
its not tanka, one or the other is suffucient. each verse is from a different person is how it goes.
glad you'e having so much fun
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author commentIan.T
Sat, 2012-09-15 03:01
Additives with no pain LOL
summer storms have passed
autumn is on the doorstep
falling leaves arrive
holding our sweet creamy dreams
let them not shatter on floor
trust dreams quiescent
muse remaining autumn scene
more timely imbue
dreams of cluttered entrances
pumpkin head scarecrows, cobwebs
meadows glowing gold
harvest moon drifts slowly by
sunsets of our dreams
cool evenings sweet serenade
children kick the fallen leaves
adolescents roll
windbreakers breaking dry leaves
innocent first kiss
youthful heat among the leaves
and harvest moons passion pink
October winds loom
with spirits same through ages
sow and harvest true
to each glowing face anew
the ancient song is playing
love the way you feel
loving the way I'm feeling
let love take us there
where sorrows have not a place
where felicity prevails
but falls harvest calls
Demeter's sorrowful search
season of decline
as hibernation soon wears
our mother nature beauties
don't want to let go
she's kept me warm all seasons
my love forever
it's in her nature
unpredictability
That love is to me
A fine inner glow that ties
With truth no lies ........................ Just Yenti again
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Barbara Writes
Sat, 2012-09-15 21:24
REVISED
summer storms have passed
autumn is on the doorstep
falling leaves arrive
holding our sweet creamy dreams
let them not shatter on floor
trust dreams quiescent
muse remaining autumn scene
more timely imbue
dreams of cluttered entrances
pumpkin head scarecrows, cobwebs
meadows glowing gold
harvest moon drifts slowly by
sunsets of our dreams
cool evenings sweet serenade
children kick the fallen leaves
adolescents roll
windbreakers breaking dry leaves
innocent first kiss
youthful heat among the leaves
and harvest moons passion pink
October winds loom
with spirits same through ages
sow and harvest true
to each glowing face anew
the ancient song is playing
love the way you feel
loving the way I'm feeling
let love take us there
where sorrows have not a place
where felicity prevails
but falls harvest calls
Demeter's sorrowful search
season of decline
as hibernation soon wears
our mother nature beauties
don't want to let go
she's kept me warm all seasons
my love forever
There is then reason for me
To wait for the sun to rise
That love is to me
A fine inner glow that ties
With truth no lies
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author commentIan.T
Sat, 2012-09-15 09:27
Barbara
Marks second stanza did you mean to leave it out.:-
It's in her nature
unpredictability
It needs a two liner of seven syllables each, in there between the last two stanzas ???
I was being lazy and only wrote one Stanza maybe that threw you a little, Yours as always, Ian.T
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Sat, 2012-09-15 10:03
yeah
Mark took it out. i or anybody different can add a two liner to replace it. that way u wont need to change yours to conform unless you want too
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author commentBarbara Writes
Sat, 2012-09-15 10:21
Mark
thats perfectly okay
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author commentIan.T
Sat, 2012-09-15 18:16
Barbara
don't want to let go
she's kept me warm all seasons
my love forever
There is then reason for me
To wait for the sun to rise
That love is to me
A fine inner glow that ties
With truth no lies
Hope this will fill the gap unless there is someone getting there first,
Take care all of you out there, Yours Ian.T
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Barbara Writes
Sat, 2012-09-15 21:24
new
summer storms have passed
autumn is on the doorstep
falling leaves arrive
holding our sweet creamy dreams
let them not shatter on floor
trust dreams quiescent
muse remaining autumn scene
more timely imbue
dreams of cluttered entrances
pumpkin head scarecrows, cobwebs
meadows glowing gold
harvest moon drifts slowly by
sunsets of our dreams
cool evenings sweet serenade
children kick the fallen leaves
adolescents roll
windbreakers breaking dry leaves
innocent first kiss
youthful heat among the leaves
and harvest moons passion pink
October winds loom
with spirits same through ages
sow and harvest true
to each glowing face anew
the ancient song is playing
love the way you feel
loving the way I'm feeling
let love take us there
where sorrows have not a place
where felicity prevails
but falls harvest calls
Demeter's sorrowful search
season of decline
as hibernation soon wears
our mother nature beauties
don't want to let go
she's kept me warm all seasons
my love forever
There is then reason for me
To wait for the sun to rise
That love is to me
A fine inner glow that ties
With truth no lies
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author commentBarbara Writes
Mon, 2012-09-17 11:15
Mark
thanks
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author commentBarbara Writes
Mon, 2012-09-17 11:15
Mark
thanks
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author commentIan.T
Mon, 2012-09-17 11:54
Softy Mark
Now to follow that it is going to get hot in the old town tonight, La La:-
summer storms have passed
autumn is on the doorstep
falling leaves arrive
holding our sweet creamy dreams
let them not shatter on floor
trust dreams quiescent
muse remaining autumn scene
more timely imbue
dreams of cluttered entrances
pumpkin head scarecrows, cobwebs
meadows glowing gold
harvest moon drifts slowly by
sunsets of our dreams
cool evenings sweet serenade
children kick the fallen leaves
adolescents roll
windbreakers breaking dry leaves
innocent first kiss
youthful heat among the leaves
and harvest moons passion pink
October winds loom
with spirits same through ages
sow and harvest true
to each glowing face anew
the ancient song is playing
love the way you feel
loving the way I'm feeling
let love take us there
where sorrows have not a place
where felicity prevails
but falls harvest calls
Demeter's sorrowful search
season of decline
as hibernation soon wears
our mother nature beauties
don't want to let go
she's kept me warm all seasons
my love forever
there is then reason for me
to wait for the sun to rise
that love is to me
a fine inner glow that ties
with truth no lies
sunshine with clouds passing by
so real is my time with her
evening covers
both embracing out of view
love sneaking through
tempered feelings touch bliss
abandonment with a kiss
One for you Mark, Yours, Ian. T
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Barbara Writes
Wed, 2012-09-19 22:26
hey Ian
in your haiku the first and last lines is off one syllable.
and the first line in your two liner is off one syllable.
after these corrections i'll submit to the stream.
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author commentIan.T
Thu, 2012-09-20 03:46
Barbara
Sorry my sibling counter malfunctioned here are those lines LOL
Then evening covers
both embracing out of view
love just sneaking through
tempered feelings touching bliss
Have a lovely day,Yours Ian.T
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Barbara Writes
Thu, 2012-09-20 20:00
thanks Ian
great lines
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author commentBarbara Writes
Mon, 2012-09-17 13:06
thanks Ian
beautiful ending.
unless mark wanted to add to it
im gonna submit this and start renga 3. who wants to start off he new theme this time.
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author commentGeezer
Mon, 2012-09-17 13:10
Here at last...
i have managed to find time
for kisses today
are tomorrow's memories
Not sure about how to add my contribution, but will send them to you. ~ Gee
There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
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Barbara Writes
Wed, 2012-09-19 22:31
Gee
thanks i'll add you to the 3 renga. you get to start it off.
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author commentBlueDemon77
Mon, 2012-09-17 20:40
That's a beautiful piece of collaborative work!
Good job to all who contributed!
Ron
Blue Demon77
"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."
The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath
Barbara Writes
Wed, 2012-09-19 23:17
hey
i second Ron comment
here is Renga 3
i have managed to find time
for kisses today
are tomorrow's memories
no matter the day begone
a first kiss eviternal
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author commentBarbara Writes
Sat, 2012-09-22 21:24
mark
beautiful one Mark
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author commentIan.T
Sat, 2012-09-22 03:00
Moreish bits
Early footprints clearly seen
Inevitable arc trod
Treasured dew drops form
Tipping new sunlight into colour
Love streams ever outward
Bouyant steps taken to journey on
Greetings overcome sorrow
A Trod in the west of England is a straight line or fairy path in the grass of a field with a different shade of green from the rest.
Have a lovely day Ya'al ?? Yours Ian.T
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Barbara Writes
Sat, 2012-09-22 21:26
Ian
I like the moreish bits
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author commentIan.T
Sun, 2012-09-23 02:56
Barbara
Sorry about writing three bits but didn't notice that the one before had ended 5-7-5, I shall wait for at least another six to eight pairs before the next bits, Take care out there have a lovely Sunday, Yours Ian.T
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Tue, 2012-09-25 08:28
Ian
Okay, not a problem glad you are here .
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author commentGeezer
Wed, 2012-09-26 21:11
I just left out...
the second two bits and put mine after the first one.
Thereby solving the problem.
I have managed to find time
for kisses today
are tomorrow’s memories
no matter the day begone
a first kiss eternal
as the sun does rise
starlings call carries in wind
land on peach dew lips
early footprints clearly seen
Inevitable arc trod
Clean sand to walk on
no one before us
our signature is right here
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Ian.T
Fri, 2012-09-28 03:39
Renga 3
Hope this is back on track with this arrangement
RENGA 3
i have managed to find time
for kisses today
are tomorrow's memories
no matter the day be gone
a first kiss eviternal
as the sun does rise
starlings call carries in wind
land on peach dew lips
early footprints clearly seen
Inevitable arc trod
Treasured dew drops form
Tipping new sunlight into colour
Love streams ever outward
Buoyant steps taken to journey on
Greetings overcome sorrow
Clean sand to walk on
no one before us
our signature is right here
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So find more reasons to believe in others..
Barbara Writes
Mon, 2012-10-01 05:45
hey everyone
Neopoet Renga 3
i have managed to find time
for kisses today
are tomorrow's memories
no matter the day begone
a first kiss eviternal
as the sun does rise
starlings call carries in wind
land on peach dew lips
early footprints clearly seen
Inevitable arc trod
clean sand to walk on
no one before us
our signature is right here
buoyant steps to journey so
greetings overcome sorrow
Ian, your 5 7 5 verses are slightly off count. the second line has 9 syllable.
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author commentIan.T
Mon, 2012-10-01 03:39
Barbara
Here are the revised two bits to continue, I have checked all the Renga but became hung up on the very first part as it is 7-5-7 I couldn't figure out what was wrong,
The two I have put in are the (Modified) same but they still fit the sequence, either before or after Gee's, if before they will have to be the 5-7-5 first.
Buoyant steps to journey so
Greetings overcome sorrow
Treasured dew drops form
Tipping new sunlight into colour
Love streaming outward
Take care out there and have lovely days, Yours Ian.T
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So find more reasons to believe in others..
Barbara Writes
Mon, 2012-10-01 05:46
Ian
Neopoet Renga 3
i have managed to find time
for kisses today
are tomorrow's memories
no matter the day begone
a first kiss eviternal
as the sun does rise
starlings call carries in wind
land on peach dew lips
early footprints clearly seen
Inevitable arc trod
clean sand to walk on
no one before us
our signature is right here
buoyant steps to journey so
greetings overcome sorrow
Ian, your 5 7 5 verses are slightly off count. the second line has 9 syllable.
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author commentIan.T
Mon, 2012-10-01 09:10
Renga 3 continuum
i have managed to find time
for kisses today
are tomorrow's memories
no matter the day begone
a first kiss eviternal
as the sun does rise
starlings call carries in wind
land on peach dew lips
early footprints clearly seen
Inevitable arc trod
clean sand to walk on
no one before us
our signature is right here
buoyant steps to journey so
greetings overcome sorrow
Treasured dew drops form
Tipping new sunlight colour
Love streaming outward
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Barbara Writes
Mon, 2012-10-01 11:29
IAN
thanks
moving forward
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author commentGeezer
Tue, 2012-10-02 14:45
Here is my latest...
A vision of loveliness
This kalideoscope view
Radiating warmth
~Gee
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Barbara Writes
Tue, 2012-10-02 23:25
Nice ounces
Syllable 5/7/5 is the structural format. You have 7/6/5. A few tweaks and it ready to roll. Thanks
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author commentIan.T
Wed, 2012-10-03 02:12
Gee
As Barbara says the syllable count is 7-6-5 so as the next piece is a two liner all you need to do is take away the third line and add one syllable to your second line making it:-
A vision of loveliness
This kaleidoscopic view
Then all things should be fine to me and you lol,
Where is that Killer I am waiting for him to appear some place else as New Orleans is having a clean up..
Yours as always Ian.T
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Barbara Writes
Wed, 2012-10-03 10:34
Thanks Ian
I didn't look at the last before commenting it is a two liner 7 7.
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author commentIan.T
Wed, 2012-10-03 11:00
Barbara
Gee wrote three lines, so I just asked him to edit it a fraction, but it was so easy for it to fall into place, can you when time permits look at Stanza One it is 7-5-7 or am I dreaming LOL I have put in an edit using your words and making the theme the same would you check to see if it's alright for you, I is getting older than old now..
I don't fear the Winter but have lots of writing to do yet,
You take care of you, Yours Ian.T
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Barbara Writes
Thu, 2012-10-04 06:05
Ian
Hey i don't see the stanza you are referring to. But I did find one syllable short in this stanza;
clean sand to walk on Maybe (upon)
no one before us
our signature is right here
Geezer
I'm still waiting for Geezer response to your suggestion on the his haiku 5/7/5 turn two stanza 7/7 below.
Gee you can resubmit this with the rest of the renga and I'll know its what you want or not. Either way some slight changes are in order in this one. If you want it to continue as a haiku, then some one different can add a two liner above yours. Either way is all good to me.
A vision of loveliness
This kalideoscope view
Radiating warmth
~Gee
A vision of loveliness
This kaleidoscopic view
Ian I won't assume Gee on board unless I'm missing something here.
Thanks for pointing out errors i want to be certain all corrections are made here before posting i check all renga post for final errors before submitting final draft anyhow
Feedback is key here
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author commentIan.T
Thu, 2012-10-04 06:23
Barbara
I edited the first Stanza if you look back as it was the wrong orientation of 7-5-7 I corrected it using Gee's words just moved the lines around lol
I hope all is OK now..
You take care these things need a lot of looking at, hope I have sorted the problem, but if I send one in with the odd syllable count wrong just edit and paste the continuation, Yours Ian.T
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Geezer
Thu, 2012-10-04 08:43
changes...
I am fine with the changes that the both of you have made.
I miscounted the number of syllables in kaleideoscope. Sorry. ~ Gee
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Thu, 2012-10-04 06:05
Renga 3 continuum
It is time to find
Our tomorrow's memories
In today's kisses
no matter the day begone
a first kiss eviternal
as the sun does rise
starlings call carries in wind
land on peach dew lips
early footprints clearly seen
Inevitable arc trod
clean sand to walk on
our signature right here
no one before us
buoyant steps to journey so
greetings overcome sorrow
Treasured dew drops form
Tipping new sunlight colour
Love streaming outward
A vision of loveliness
This kaleidoscopic view
This is hard work sometimes but a joy when it comes right,
Yours Ian.T
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Barbara Writes
Thu, 2012-10-04 06:09
Ian
There is nothing like good hard work to keep the mind healthy.
Lol
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author commentIan.T
Thu, 2012-10-04 06:12
Barbara and Gee
I hope you both don't mind I have changed the lines around that had been put on the Renga, as the Renga is a series of 5-7-5 then 7-7 please check that I haven't changed your Meaning on any of your parts.
I wonder why this one is being naughty as the first two went so well.
This one is becoming a beautiful poem, Yours Ian.T
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Barbara Writes
Wed, 2012-10-10 20:49
great one Mark
just one syllable off in the first line
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author commentBarbara Writes
Thu, 2012-10-11 06:52
diamonds
i checked the dictionary and it is a two syllable word. dia.monds.
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author commentIan.T
Wed, 2012-10-10 03:54
Night Night all
Softly spoken words flow on
Lovers cuddling touch, floating
.
As Velvet curtains
Dreams are draped over your form.
Till morning awakes
Have a lovely night out there, Yours Ian.T
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Barbara Writes
Wed, 2012-10-10 20:54
lovely verses
really good stuff here
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author commentRula
Thu, 2012-10-11 07:12
spark upon a dignified
spark upon a dignified
sweet,angelic realm-a smile
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Barbara Writes
Thu, 2012-10-11 07:09
nice verse
the second line in your verse has 8 syllables rather than 7.
on another note, i think these lines changed the theme a bit. to one of religion. maybe the fourth renga with this tone might be a fine idea. what you think?
sounds like an interesting topic a renga with both religious and anti religious views in one poem.
so what do you think renga members, no religious war just views. :)
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author commentRula
Thu, 2012-10-11 07:15
I have changed to 7
just ignore them dear Barbra if they don't go with your theme.
Have a nice day all.
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Barbara Writes
Thu, 2012-10-11 07:27
nope
i don't ignore verses here. its not my theme, the first verse in the renga sets the theme then the next verse follows whatever the last verse is.
everyones verse has a place here.
i would like to see your verse in renga 4 i have a haiku to start it off. unless you want to start renga 4 theme with you verse, it would need to be a haiku though with 5/7/5 syllable format.
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author commentBarbara Writes
Sat, 2012-10-27 02:58
Rula :)
I've added your two lines. It works well where it is. I see the tone is the same as it does fit the theme. Angelic realm put me in heaven rather than heaven on earth lol. I loved the verse. Would you like to start renga 4?
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author commentBarbara Writes
Thu, 2012-10-11 07:17
renga 3
It is time to find
Our tomorrow's memories
In today's kisses
no matter the day begone
a first kiss eviternal
as the sun does rise
starlings call carries in wind
land on peach dew lips
early footprints clearly seen
Inevitable arc trod
clean sand to walk on
our signature right here
no one before us
buoyant steps to journey so
greetings overcome sorrow
treasured dew drops form
tipping new sunlight colour
love streaming outward
a vision of loveliness
this kaleidoscopic view
(and) diamonds are skies
harvest moon kisses blossom
hang brightly the night
alluring torrid whispers
travels on into the dawn
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author commentBarbara Writes
Thu, 2012-10-11 07:30
lol
thought i might get your attention. seriously though my dictionary says dia.monds is 2 syllables.
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author commentjudyanne
Thu, 2012-10-11 08:02
diamonds
is one of those words that is acceptable pronounced with either two or three syllables :)
cheers
judy xxx
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Barbara Writes
Thu, 2012-10-11 08:24
okay
i would like to see that in your dictionary. you have a link?
my mouth can only form two syllables. i must see how you pronounced it for me to imagine three.
"love learning new things"
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author commentjudyanne
Thu, 2012-10-11 09:03
well, there is more than one dictionary and one accent
the Australian Concise Oxford Dictionary, Melbourne Oxford University Press (Oxford, Aukland, New York) states
diamond – [dar em end]
dictionary.com says
dia·mond [dahy-muhnd, dahy-uh-]
cheers
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
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Barbara Writes
Thu, 2012-10-11 11:10
I'm not particular about accents just syllable count
i found the australian dictionary on line and it shows three syllable. / di·a·mond (d-mnd, dmnd)
it perfect as is.
like learning new things
I'm still trying to hear it pronounced. the dictionary audio is not speaking online for me at this moment.
i see it now and like it as mark has written..
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author commentBarbara Writes
Thu, 2012-10-11 07:37
Rolling out double themes
Neopoet Renga 4
spark upon a dignified
sweet,angelic realm-a smile
a first verse in haiku is all thats needed to get this ship sailing.
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author commentBarbara Writes
Thu, 2012-10-11 11:32
okay i agree
which ever one you want is good,
i found the free oxford australian dictionary online and it is 3 syllables. (di.a.monds)
my Rhymulator app on my iPad shows two syllables (di·a·mond (d-mnd, dmnd))
since we are diverse poets here, either is acceptable. its up to the author of the verse to decide what accent he/she wants readers to hear.
food for thought here esp. mine. :)
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author commentBarbara Writes
Thu, 2012-10-11 11:39
New Renga 3
It is time to find
Our tomorrow's memories
In today's kisses
no matter the day begone
a first kiss eviternal
as the sun does rise
starlings call carries in wind
land on peach dew lips
early footprints clearly seen
Inevitable arc trod
clean sand to walk on
our signature right here
no one before us
buoyant steps to journey so
greetings overcome sorrow
treasured dew drops form
tipping new sunlight colour
love streaming outward
a vision of loveliness
this kaleidoscopic view
diamonds are skies
harvest moon kisses blossom
hang brightly the night
alluring torrid whispers
travels on into the dawn
Mark ill let you repost as the way you want it
thanks for creating new brain cells in my cerebrum.:)
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author commentIan.T
Thu, 2012-10-11 12:25
Barbara
What happened too my two Stanzas it took me three days to write it:-
Softly spoken words flow on
Lovers cuddling touch, floating
.
As Velvet curtains
Dreams are draped over your form.
Till morning awakes
They will still fit into this Renga as they are lol,
Yours Ian.T
Title of my bit was "Night Night All" But then damn Diamonds blinded you all.
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Barbara Writes
Thu, 2012-10-11 12:41
ohh mishap
my copy has it in, but missing here.
it's back, i fixed it,
It is time to find
our tomorrow's memories
In today's kisses
no matter the day begone
a first kiss eviternal
as the sun does rise
starlings call carries in wind
land on peach dew lips
early footprints clearly seen
Inevitable arc trod
clean sand to walk on
our signature right here
no one before us
buoyant steps to journey so
greetings overcome sorrow
treasured dew drops form
tipping new sunlight colour
love streaming outward
a vision of loveliness
this kaleidoscopic view
diamonds are skies
harvest moon kisses blossom
hang brightly the night
softly spoken words flow on
lovers cuddling touch, floating
as velvet curtains
dreams are draped over your form.
till morning awakes
alluring torrid whispers
travels on into the dawn
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author commentBarbara Writes
Fri, 2012-10-12 20:38
Great
There it is for he next participant
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author commentIan.T
Mon, 2012-10-22 03:32
A dibble dabble + 3
It is time to find
our tomorrow's memories
In today's kisses
no matter the day begone
a first kiss eviternal
as the sun does rise
starlings call carries in wind
land on peach dew lips
early footprints clearly seen
Inevitable arc trod
clean sand to walk on
our signature right here
no one before us
buoyant steps to journey so
greetings overcome sorrow
treasured dew drops form
tipping new sunlight colour
love streaming outward
a vision of loveliness
this kaleidoscopic view
diamonds are skies
harvest moon kisses blossom
hang brightly the night
softly spoken words flow on
lovers cuddling touch, floating
as velvet curtains
dreams are draped over your form.
till morning awakes
alluring torrid whispers
travels on into the dawn
Pumpkins carved out true
A face makes you broadly smile
Teeth glow at night seen
Jack frost touches patterns fine
Wintertime is now soon due
No time left to go
Fireworks light the skies with Ow!
Faces in firelight glow
Just the last newly written three, Yours as always Ian.T
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BlueDemon77
Wed, 2012-10-24 22:41
sorry!
mistake 1
Blue Demon77
"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."
The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath
BlueDemon77
Wed, 2012-10-24 22:42
sorry!
mistake 2
Blue Demon77
"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."
The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath
BlueDemon77
Wed, 2012-10-24 22:43
sorry!
mistake 3
Blue Demon77
"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."
The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath
BlueDemon77
Wed, 2012-10-24 22:45
Sorry!
Mistake 4
Blue Demon77
"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."
The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath
BlueDemon77
Wed, 2012-10-24 22:45
Sorry!
Mistake 5
Blue Demon77
"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."
The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath
BlueDemon77
Wed, 2012-10-24 22:46
Sorry!
Mistake 6
Blue Demon77
"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."
The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath
BlueDemon77
Wed, 2012-10-24 22:47
Sorry!
mistake 7
Blue Demon77
"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."
The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath
BlueDemon77
Wed, 2012-10-24 22:49
Sorry!
Mistake 8......last one.
I apologize to Barbara and the group.
Ron
Blue Demon77
"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."
The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath
BlueDemon77
Tue, 2012-10-23 10:00
new
It is time to find
our tomorrow's memories
In today's kisses
no matter the day begone
a first kiss eviternal
as the sun does rise
starlings call carries in wind
land on peach dew lips
early footprints clearly seen
Inevitable arc trod
clean sand to walk on
our signature right here
no one before us
buoyant steps to journey so
greetings overcome sorrow
treasured dew drops form
tipping new sunlight colour
love streaming outward
a vision of loveliness
this kaleidoscopic view
diamonds are skies
harvest moon kisses blossom
hang brightly the night
softly spoken words flow on
lovers cuddling touch, floating
as velvet curtains
dreams are draped over your form.
till morning awakes
alluring torrid whispers
travels on into the dawn
Pumpkins carved out true
A face makes you broadly smile
Teeth glow at night seen
Jack frost touches patterns fine
Wintertime is now soon due
No time left to go
Fireworks light the skies with Ow!
Faces in firelight glow
Jack o'lantern fires flare
Samhain shadows paid in full
In the costumed shades
do sundered spirits sparkle
hairs stand up on neck
as near the harvest beckons
shores against the Winter's cold
a little addition
Ron
Blue Demon77
"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."
The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath
Barbara Writes
Wed, 2012-10-24 08:40
New thanks Ian and Ron
Renga 3
It is time to find
our tomorrow's memories
In today's kisses
no matter the day begone
a first kiss eviternal
as the sun does rise
starlings call carries in wind
land on peach dew lips
early footprints clearly seen
Inevitable arc trod
clean sand to walk on
our signature right here
no one before us
buoyant steps to journey so
greetings overcome sorrow
treasured dew drops form
tipping new sunlight colour
love streaming outward
a vision of loveliness
this kaleidoscopic view
diamonds are skies
harvest moon kisses blossom
hang brightly the night
softly spoken words flow on
lovers cuddling touch, floating
as velvet curtains
dreams are draped over your form.
till morning awakes
alluring torrid whispers
travels on into the dawn
pumpkins carved out true
a face makes you broadly smile
teeth glow at night seen
jack frost touches patterns fine
wintertime is now soon due
no time left to go
fireworks light the skies with Ow!
faces in firelight glow
jack o'lantern fires (fire (fr) flare
Samhain shadows paid in full
in the costumed shades
do sundered spirits sparkle
hairs stand up on neck
as near the harvest beckons
shores against the Winter's cold
Octoberfest nears
November-feast approaches
Winter wonderland
Marshmallows roasting fireplace
Cold winter nights keeping warm
A bit of a change in tone,, great lines Ron check your first verse seems one syllable off. Great Lines I like these. My new lines
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author commentBlueDemon77
Wed, 2012-10-24 22:40
Sorry about the multiples. Neo wasn't accepting it
So I kept trying. I'll edit saying disregard on the duplicates. at least it wont take up some space.
Sorry alll.
Ron
Blue Demon77
"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."
The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath
BlueDemon77
Wed, 2012-10-24 22:57
Thanks Barbara, I'll change it.
I was assuming fires as Fi - errs at two syllables. You are correct. Thank you. : )
Ron
Blue Demon77
"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."
The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath
BlueDemon77
Wed, 2012-10-24 22:57
Thanks Barbara, I'll change it.
I was assuming fires as Fi - errs at two syllables. You are correct. Thank you. : )
Ron
Blue Demon77
"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."
The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath
BlueDemon77
Wed, 2012-10-24 22:58
new
It is time to find
our tomorrow's memories
In today's kisses
no matter the day begone
a first kiss eviternal
as the sun does rise
starlings call carries in wind
land on peach dew lips
early footprints clearly seen
Inevitable arc trod
clean sand to walk on
our signature right here
no one before us
buoyant steps to journey so
greetings overcome sorrow
treasured dew drops form
tipping new sunlight colour
love streaming outward
a vision of loveliness
this kaleidoscopic view
diamonds are skies
harvest moon kisses blossom
hang brightly the night
softly spoken words flow on
lovers cuddling touch, floating
as velvet curtains
dreams are draped over your form.
till morning awakes
alluring torrid whispers
travels on into the dawn
pumpkins carved out true
a face makes you broadly smile
teeth glow at night seen
jack frost touches patterns fine
wintertime is now soon due
no time left to go
fireworks light the skies with Ow!
faces in firelight glow
jack o'lantern bonfires flare
Samhain shadows paid in full
in the costumed shades
do sundered spirits sparkle
hairs stand up on neck
as near the harvest beckons
shores against the Winter's cold
Octoberfest nears
November-feast approaches
Winter wonderland
Marshmallows roasting fireplace
Cold winter nights keeping warm
Blue Demon77
"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."
The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath
Barbara Writes
Fri, 2012-10-26 15:44
Thanks Ron lol
I wonder about you lol
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author commentBlueDemon77
Sat, 2012-10-27 07:10
Yes, Barbara....
I've been told I'm a little wacky.....lol!
Ron
Blue Demon77
"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."
The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath
Barbara Writes
Sat, 2012-10-27 11:20
Yeah
Been called. The same lol
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author commentBarbara Writes
Sat, 2012-10-27 02:51
Thanks everybody
Here is Renga 3 to be submitted to the stream
Renga 3
It is time to find
our tomorrow's memories
In today's kisses
no matter the day begone
a first kiss eviternal
as the sun does rise
starlings call carries in wind
land on peach dew lips
early footprints clearly seen
Inevitable arc trod
clean sand to walk on
our signature right here
no one before us
buoyant steps to journey so
greetings overcome sorrow
treasured dew drops form
tipping new sunlight colour
love streaming outward
a vision of loveliness
this kaleidoscopic view
diamonds are skies
harvest moon kisses blossom
hang brightly the night
(spark upon a dignified)
(sweet,angelic realm-a smile)
as velvet curtains
dreams are draped over your form.
till morning awakes
alluring torrid whispers
travels on into the dawn
pumpkins carved out true
a face makes you broadly smile
teeth glow at night seen
jack frost touches patterns fine
wintertime is now soon due
no time left to go
fireworks light the skies with Ow!
faces in firelight glow
jack o'lantern bonfires flare
Samhain shadows paid in full
in the costumed shades
do sundered spirits sparkle
hairs stand up on neck
as near the harvest beckons
shores against the Winter's cold
Octoberfest nears
November-feast approaches
winter wonderland
marshmallows roasting fireplace
cold winter nights keeping warm
I wonder about me more Ron lol. Found out I have dementia the symptom today rather than Alzheimer the disease.. Glad not to have the big A after all these years. i now gotta research dementia like I did Alzheimer to keep it from taking over my life for as long as I can
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author commentBarbara Writes
Sat, 2012-10-27 12:26
Renga 4
New
Heavenly sovereign
Almighty rightfully rules
Earthly citizen
Earthly ruler ship struggle
blue, red fight for sovereignty
Write your verse as to who should rule men whether Earthly government or Heavenly government. Who'd be better men and their ideology or God's thoughts via the Bible channeled down from heavens through those imperfect ones seeking his will, 'not those seeking unrighteous gains'.
Should men continue to rule self and others why, why not.
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author commentIan.T
Sun, 2012-11-04 03:56
Just a touch of love
They lost their belief
Because they refuse to see
The goodness inside
Walk with pure love for all
Unconditionally love
Yours Ian.T
PS:- Barbara could you start a new blog as this one is so far down lol
Take care and know we are thinking of you all out there.
We have to also put up with your election over here so you have my thoughts for a quiet corner.
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Barbara Writes
Sun, 2012-11-04 07:57
Thanks Ian
I'm in Sc so not affected by H-Sandy. We are glad our east coasters are getting help they need.
Ill be glad when the election is over. My my its the worse ever.
I'm looking to see fist, knives, and gun fight come tuesday lol. I don't watch much tv. I pick and choose on my iPad how much I watch. I can take a break online unlike television. I feel for those trying to watch their favorite stations. Lol
Thanks for the verses. I see sour another blog
New
Heavenly sovereign
Almighty rightfully rules
Earthly citizen.
Earthly ruler ship struggle
blue, red fight for sovereignty
They lost their belief
Because they refuse to see
The goodness inside
Walk with pure love for all
Unconditionally love
Last two verses need one syllable a piece more.
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author commentIan.T
Sun, 2012-11-04 08:52
Barbara
They lost their belief
Because they refuse to see
The goodness inside
Walk now with pure love for all
Unconditionally love
Cant find any thing else bar the now I have put into the fourth line,
Yours Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Barbara Writes
Sun, 2012-11-04 15:48
Sounds good to me
I have a suggestion for your two liner.
Since you used love in the first line maybe you could use another word for love. And
You'l have one more syllable making the last line in the two line verse complete with 7 syllables.
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author commentIan.T
Sun, 2012-11-04 17:29
Barbara
Walk now with purest feelings
Of Unconditional Love
I hope this will be OK as it amplifies the second line
Take care yours as always Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Barbara Writes
Sun, 2012-11-04 20:39
Great Renga
Heavenly sovereign
Almighty rightfully rules
Earthly citizen.
Terrene rulership struggle
blue, red fight for sovereignty
They lost their belief
Because they refuse to see
The goodness inside
Walk now with purest feelings
Of Unconditional Love
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author commentbossladyone
Wed, 2012-11-07 06:20
Barbara
May I join in
Till time comes we meet
Those gone before us again
On heavenly grounds
It is very interesting the thoughts of everyone
Barbara Writes
Wed, 2012-11-07 17:17
Yes you are most welcome
Thanks for the haiku.
I will add you on here and the continuing workshop
You came in at the end but right on time
Thanks for joining.
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author commentBarbara Writes
Wed, 2012-11-07 17:11
Workshop ending
I am continuing Eternal Renga in a new workshop
All participants names has been carried over and new participants will be added.
I want to thank everyone for joining and participating. It is a joy working with all you guys.
Let move over to Eternal Renga Continues and create more Neopoet Renga.
Renga 4 will be in move to "Eternal Renga Continues".
Heavenly sovereign
Almighty rightfully rules
Earthly citizen.
Terrene rulership struggle
blue, red fight for sovereignty
They lost their belief
Because they refuse to see
The goodness inside
Walk now with purest feelings
Of Unconditional Love
Till time comes we meet
Those gone before us again
On heavenly grounds
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author commentBarbara Writes
Wed, 2012-11-07 17:11
Workshop ending
I am continuing Eternal Renga in a new workshop
All participants names has been carried over and new participants will be added.
I want to thank everyone for joining and participating. It is a joy working with all you guys.
Let move over to Eternal Renga Continues and create more Neopoet Renga.
Renga 4 will be in move to "Eternal Renga Continues".
Heavenly sovereign
Almighty rightfully rules
Earthly citizen.
Terrene rulership struggle
blue, red fight for sovereignty
They lost their belief
Because they refuse to see
The goodness inside
Walk now with purest feelings
Of Unconditional Love
Till time comes we meet
Those gone before us again
On heavenly grounds
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author commentBarbara Writes
Wed, 2012-11-07 23:15
Workshop ending
I am continuing Eternal Renga in a new workshop
All participants names has been carried over and new participants will be added.
I want to thank everyone for joining and participating. It is a joy working with all you guys.
Let move over to Eternal Renga Continues and create more Neopoet Renga.
Renga 4 will be in move to "Eternal Renga Continues".
Heavenly sovereign
Almighty rightfully rules
Earthly citizen.
Terrene rulership struggle
blue, red fight for sovereignty
They lost their belief
Because they refuse to see
The goodness inside
Walk now with purest feelings
Of Unconditional Love
Till time comes we meet
Those gone before us again
On heavenly grounds
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author commentBarbara Writes
Wed, 2012-11-07 17:19
Thanks Again Everybody
See you in "Eternal Renga Continues" workshop
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author commentbossladyone
Wed, 2012-11-07 21:12
Thank you Barbara
Thank you so much