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Submitted by Liamb on 15 April 2008 - 1:56pm.
Style / Type:
freeform
Time is an assumption of moving on
Measured hours are but the milestones
With each passing minute a new beginning
The sun and moon control the days
Darkness and light is at their bidding
Replaced by mechanical assumption?
That man would beg to master time
In measured control, his march to demise
In anticipation of tomorrow’s dreams
The sweeping hands of the ticking clock
Measure not the passing of time
But record only his depth of impatience
(2 votes)
great
great analysis.
I have a soft spot on my heart for time pieces.
I do worry that “mechanical assumption” is not communicating what you hoped it would.
I assume you mean that we have harnessed energy and can cast light where there should be dark. Live when we should sleep.
But I arrive at this assumption from the previous lines of that stanza.
Would you care to explain it to me?
-Daniel
That man would beg to master
That man would beg to master time
I agree - this has a smooth flow and works really well.
Kaz
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