Oh Cornelia,
Its been long since I heard your voice
So long since I heard you laugh.
You are someone I have to live with
Someone I cant live without.
I mis your sweet,tender voice
Like a child misses the voice of his mother
Like the grass misses the rain
During the drought.
I havent stopped thinking about you all day
Its like something in my life is missing
But everytime I breath I feel you next to me
Looking at your picture every second
Is the closest I can get to you
When I feel down
Your voice comes to my mind
Giving me new strenght to never let go
I miss your I LOVE YOU
But I know you’re there……miles away
I hold on to my pillow,I lay my head on it.
Its seems like a nightmare
From wich I want to wake up,
But when I open my eyes I realize
That you are not here……a sparkling tear
Becomes visible in my eyes
I cant sleep,I don’t want to
I pray to God to bring you back soon, I cant wait
I don’t know yet how I fell for you….
People don’t belive in love at first sight
I do……..the reason?
YOU.
Oh Princess Cornelia,
Sweet and Loving Cornelia
As I write this……you are laying on your bed
Recovering your strenght
And who know?
Maybe thinking about me…. Your Prince Dominick,
The one wich his heart belongs to you.
I say good-bye for now
But our Lord God shall let us meet again
Till then, Farewell my Princess
Love
Dominick
safety poem
i used to write all the time like this
its okay
but what do you really feel about this
person
wheres the ache the agony
or the sublte lightness of being
like a kiss on the cheek in sleep
before slipping off in the night
i know you must have more
theres nothing wrong with the way
the poem is written
it just seems kind of weak to me
but maybe im just an old hardcore
been through the trenchs so many
freakin times already
dont get me wrong i relate to the
softness and all
its romantic
i just feel theres more
could be just me
p.s. im just here commenting
because it was a damn good
suggestion by someone
to help out on the Lonely
and damned if your not the
only one here who seems
lonely
i can relate though
many a princess has come
and gone in my day
maybe im just too hardened
heh heh
take care keep writing
ill keep reading
O
I agree with orgami. I have
I agree with orgami. I have to admit I am not the biggest fan of love poetry and I felt some of the phrases you used were a little well worn. BUT this could be a great poem and I felt you could improve the metaphors/imagery and make it really come to life. This read a little like a letter to the person. Its a good read but as O says it could use more to make it stronger. Maybe a shorter poem and some more focussed phrases - see what you think.
Kaz
It’s impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.