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Seems we are all fighting that fight
“realize”

Just a suggestion and nothing more
what if you were to say the Death of life
and at the end
I cry , I fight and I mourn
just a thought
Chrys

I’ll join ya and we’ll start a revolution for evolution make her beautiful once more. Don’t cry no more, fight! Where to start? I’m thinking good old fasioned violence for the cocks :) Like blowing up buildings ! I have nothing to lose, you? The likes of Michael as man on earth. For earth !
Mark

from my perspective, when a man cries, it’s axiomatic he (including you, of course) has reason enough. And that even if the reason’s not explained … or understood—either by himself or by others.

Thanx,
Chuck

Well Weirdelf

my week was another lost week
yes i love this poem
and like you i lost my brand new bike
downtown
i woke up still alive and full of knocks
and bumps lost some I.D. also
but kept the money and bike lock

strange apparations of thought

as for corporate affairs
i worked once for the union
a good one and a big company
now called ACEON a big construction
do that was once known as Cliffside
here in Ontario Canada

i worked for a lesser unit of them
at that time but the bosses didnt
care and the foreman was a rude pig
and they dumped me more or less

red necks but i had fun with my
fellows i made freinds with

and i have lost wallets too
and probably glasses if i had any

but so i relate
as of late

i am going back to meetings now
and trying to be good
too much to lose from what i have
all been given by nice helping
people

well i care
i hear you
and i like
this poem

straight from the heart
take care my freind
here i can hear new birds
singing as the grass
emerges and soon
flowers will rise and
bloom and the lake
will be free of ice
and alive again

as we are too

Your brother
with love

O

True male emotions. Makes me sad that this world can treat people this way with out any compassion. The biggest company in out little town is being shut down all over the US because a huge company don’t like them. No thought of those working there. These are critical times hard to deal with.

You have captured the plight of many perfectly. I can see the realization that love resides with the few and lost to the many.

I agree the ending could flow a little better.

From beginning to end the images flow perfectly. Great no changes I feel is needed

Smiles:)
Barbara

True male emotions. Makes me sad that this world can treat people this way with out any compassion. The biggest company in out little town is being shut down all over the US because a huge company don’t like them. No thought of those working there. These are critical times hard to deal with.

You have captured the plight of many perfectly. I can see the realization that love resides with the few and lost to the many.

I agree the word ending could flow a little better.
Otherwise
From beginning to end the images flow perfectly no changes I feel is necessary

Smiles:)
Barbara

Liberty lost to governments
Corporations putting us down, – rubber stamping
The likes of me & you
Throwing Breadcrumbs
For the lucky
Few,

Jess
Sad times we live in!

Peter

Corporate cocks and uncaring gods
they all screw us in the end
what’s one to do?
live your life
and relish in the ironies
when those cocks get lopped off
by other knives wielded by other cocks,
bigger than them
and pointed at them
…and not you.
Unfortunately, that’s all there is to do.

(oh and write more poems, damn it man, write more poems!!!)

I have a suggestion. To cut down on the repitition, you could say:
I cry
and I scream
and I howl
and I sob

Losing all three of those items are major. I can relate to all of it. Like the poem.

Always, Cat

you have a new fan right here.
Niki

on another note I once read a comment where somebody said they were pushing 5,000 points and I thought - how can that be? But then I think that was the only person ever having read the entire stream. So I decided to land here far from perfect but always giving it a good go.
Mark

That is a very sad poem! I like the free style using a few short lines to draw the reader into the poem and then you keep their attention throughout. Sorry ole fellow about the loss of the job—if they paid you for your poetic talent you would be a millionare. In the simplist words you haved conveyed great beauty in our language. Drachm

cheers,
Jess

Smiles:)
Barbara

Reading this again it just gets better.
Agree with Drachm your poem are great, I always look
forward to reading them.

I have six sisters, one called Barbara… hang on! I feel a poem coming on! This is an opportunity not to be missed, been so dry lately, look for “Sorority Benefit”
cheers,
Jess

Smiles:)
Barbara

Barbara is a special name so many Barbara’s

Can’t wait to read it.

..I really felt the loss of hope, as you cried. It matters not, “why”, or “how hard”; what I felt was, that you cried so uncontrollably, at all.
I felt this, because I’ve been there.
In fact,
I’m still wiping away the tears.
Who says that we cry, alone?
I think, NOT.
Waiting for a bed,
doc.

you are always searching for the reason you cry instead of just accepting the fact that perhaps you need to do so. Is it society that tells you to do this, or some dark inclination that voices its opinion with whispers in your ear of weakness and frailty.

I prefer a man who cries without reason or fear. It shows far more strength than those who hide behind either as an excuse for tears.

Best,
Ronda

I cry often enough anyway,
cheers,
Jess

Can relate to crying
when i get frustrated full of fear
and feeling helpless i stop
and let it out rather then
shut down
smash it down
and cover it up with
my old addictions

not first without sparks though
but its not the old ways i do now

poem is beautiful

large companies
come and sweep up everything
devouring competition

like Star Treks “Borgs”
(not a big fiction fan but loved
those shows!!!!)

Just heard up here in Oshawa Canada
that GM is shutting down the truck
plant A thousand workers out of work
and in Mexico a plant there and two
in the States

so yes its natural and fair
to have something that large
to even think about going up
against

Dear Weirdelf: Beautifully written. I know how you must feel, really I do. Sometimes, all I want to do is cry. Much Love, Janice Herzog xoxoxo P.S. A++++.

It all helped me feel less alone, but also realise we are not completely powerless against the corporate cocks. Protest, letter writing, other forms of political action, even (heaven forfend!) voting. All make a difference.
cheers,
Jess

Dear Weirdelf: It just shows that you have a heart, and aren’t afraid to express your feelings or emotions. I am the same way, and i think it shows in my poetry. Never be afarid to show your true inner self. I am learning this again. I really do believe that Love Conquers All. Much Love, Janice Herzog xoxo