ringing in the ears. another
anxious moment disperses itself
in waste like vulturous grains
of sand gone to a hidden register
reporting more hidden light unseen.
the boy’s fingertips become loose
watercolors awash with DNA coded
nightmares. he pulls his slumping
lunchbox from an oak desk without initials
thinking about a freckled face like
an old potato and small fists like
wooden bees. the brown leaves circling the
bus stop are bleached copper by the
sun itching his unlaced sneakers
like dry preying mantises. the
bus arrives grinding steamed metal
fear and porous faces grinning from
the engine’s dirty chrome. the door
closes and all laughter is their own
another opens with splintered fury
as a dated ornament falls to the ground
a woman looks from moist eyelashes
and sees the bus thinking she remembers
how easy it was to be young.
Submitted by quillsvein1 on 24 June 2007 - 9:44pm.| Updated 24 June 2007 - 10:44pm.
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Wow, the density of imagery almost knocked me on my back.
The flow is great, it reads aloud well. I thought at first there was an overuse of similes but there are only 4. Maybe it’s just that the imagery is so dense it obscures the content at times? Not sure. But I like it.
cheers,
Jess