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Water is vital for humans,
Like you are essential for me
Sometimes I sit here in my room….
Wondering where you at….
Endless nights
Cloudy days of winter
Waiting for your voice
To warm up my heart.
Time is passing bit by bit
Is taking forever to meet
Seconds become hours
Hours become Eternity
I can’t wait any longer
I feel like I’m dying slowly.
You’ve gathered
All the missing pieces of my life
And my shattered heart inside
Just like a big puzzle
Putting it together
I’m overwhelm by your love
I’m so glad I’ve found you;
The person I’ve been waiting for
To meet along the way,
The one to take all my past
And put it away.
To make me forget all the pain
Caused by those who mistreated me.
Wen I think of you
There’s nothing else in my mind
You’re an answered prayer
Request that has been every night before God Almighty
I’m so thankful with Him
I’m so glad I waited.

I get lost in you,
Lost in my thoughts
Wishing having you in my arms
To tell you how I feel.
No with words,
There’s no terminology to tell you
How much I love you.
You are my own shooting star
And I shall make a wish upon you
To make me the happiest guy ever
To care and love me unconditionally
To never smash my heart
And never make me to the side.
This story is over
This chapter is concluding
Farewell sorrow
Farewell pain
Since the first time
You stepped into my life.
Heed now my love
I hint nowadays
Away from eternity
Away from eternity
But never from you my love
That I adore so dearly my sweetheart
Thy heart bears me inside
I crave for your warm cuddling
I yearn for your silky lips
Oh my love,
Beautiful and Caring
Angel sent from above
Sweet and Charming
You’ve captured my heart
Taking every part of me,
And building it new,
With your delightful fragrance of roses
Making every dream come true.
Away from eternity
But never from you
My love
Thy love remains within me
Remains for ever

 

 

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Submitted by Barbara Writes on 25 March 2008 - 10:59pm.
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I enjoyed reading

Barbara Writes flow a little off, some typos, kinda lose me at times. It’s a really great piece other wise.

Submitted by Dominick on 26 March 2008 - 10:55am.
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Thanks 4 commenting on the

Thanks 4 commenting on the poem…i really aprettiate it……