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I am only tired of the sinking
the subtle decline
the slow rot

flesh can only hold so tight
and bones never ask.

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Average: 4 (4 votes)
Submitted by Candlewitch on 19 March 2008 - 3:59am.
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Yes

Ageing is no picnic. Excellent poem.

Always, Cat

Submitted by whitetea on 25 March 2008 - 2:18am.
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thanks!

thank you for saying so, I appreciate your having read this.

Submitted by mark on 19 March 2008 - 5:49am.
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When I looked up

after I parked my car to see a skunk all shiny clean from the night rain feeding in the snow covered lawn and watched it for a minute then got out of my car we looked at each other for another minute. Maybe we were wondering what we wanted to say, hello, and of course me being me I did. I turned and walked away and it continued to feed. I can’t think about rotting things or flesh falling off bone right now but your poem or rather that there was a comment attracted me and I doubt anybody can say it better than Cat :) May I add - true poetry !
Mark

Submitted by whitetea on 20 March 2008 - 2:14am.
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thanks!

always a pleasure to see you drop by, Mark.

I want to thank you for the spontaneity there, what an image. Reminds me of something I’ve read once.

Submitted by mark on 21 March 2008 - 8:04am.
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bones never ask

they have no choice but to let it go :)
Mark

Submitted by abrelosojos on 19 March 2008 - 12:44pm.
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enjoyed the last lines a

enjoyed the last lines a lot. very good short poem :)

fragile things: take flight!

Submitted by whitetea on 20 March 2008 - 2:26am.
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I appreciate that, thank

I appreciate that, thank you!

Submitted by pinksheep on 24 March 2008 - 2:14pm.

The

bones never ask, tremendous-pink

Submitted by Infinite_Dwarf on 8 May 2008 - 8:58pm.
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I really....

…like the closing lines of this piece. Nice job.

~Lynn (Jess K.)
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