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Early in the poem you say, “No longer softly spoken words,
To be heard I am forced to shout,” and yet I hear no screaming as the poem progresses. This puzzles me, and in that do I find I very much like this work: paints a picture, at least for me, of the uncertain, the confused, and yet a glimmer inside of want, of need, of lust to understand what the ‘fabric of life’s web” means, and what “the puppeteer’s” reason for pulling threads, either known or distant, loved or unknown.

I too feel that “to be heard I am forced to shout,” and yet the voice I need for that, escapes me–maybe someday I will find the strength.

Lovely work.

all I can say is that I think you are truly gifted

Marie

In the line:

“As the the thread gathers on the floor” should it be:

“As the threads gather on the floor” (?)

Throughout the poem I ws under the impression that your tapestry (you) were losing several threads, not just one long thread. This was the only point I was unsure of.
I loved the rest of the poem. Very Nice!

Always, Cat

One delicate thread from the fabric of life’s web
when slowly pulled by the puppeteer
Will cause that world to unravel
Leaving only fear

This could be applied to so many situations. I work with people all the time where threads are unravelled to such an extent that the confidence and self esteem has gone. I work with the homeless and anyone of our current residents i am sure could relate to this poem closely. This is beautifully crafted and written. If I had to nitpick I would suggest you recheck the poem as there a couple of typing errors - but this doesnt affect the flow or essence of the poem. I really enjoyed reading this - thank you. Your insight is brilliant!

Kaz

It’s impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.

Hi Chrys

Here are the ones I spotted - they are tiny to be honest but see what you think!

As the the thread gathers on the floor - one ‘the’ needs deleting.

Traveler should be traveller and traveled - travelled

Thats it I think - this is even better second time around!

Kaz

It’s impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.

I have deleted one of the “THE”s
but the words traveler and traveled
according to the dictionary , spell check and the thesaurus are spelled correctly
aha I found it Kaz
the difference is in our location lol
you spell it one way we spell it another and therein lies the explanation for why you and I see the same word differently
I had this problem before with someone so we are both correct
thanks
Chrys

Gee maybe they should put us in charge of our countries see how amicably we solved that problem lol
Chrys

On making the spotlight!

Always, Cat

I Would Love The Key to your treasure chest of words, your imagination seems
to know no bounds, beautifully conveyed-

Respectfully

Peter