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bought the universe today
pored over it and cried
still homesick
didn’t get it back

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Submitted by conect11 on 23 June 2007 - 1:23pm.

I think

I have that book. Damn the Hubble telescope! I don’t think this poem needs to be expanded so much as it needs to be fleshed out, you’re just missing “something,” and I can’t figure out what. It’s like it’s almost there.

Submitted by weirdelf on 25 June 2007 - 6:31am.
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Like Kim

I find it very hard to go back to edit work, but this one I think I will
cheers,
Jess

Submitted by Rottiestyl on 24 June 2007 - 7:27am.
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I get it

Trying to feel AT home in this world can be a lonely
thing. Still homesick to me means, a person trying to find the place where they belong and nowhere in the photos of the Universe did a spark of recognition apprear. Very deep for such a short write. I like it Jess. You have alot of you running around in your head. You think that maybe your lost, but your not. Your right here where I can see you. Nice writing!

K. Mulroney

Submitted by weirdelf on 24 June 2007 - 7:01pm.
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Close! 8)

but actually I am an alien, just homesick, that’s all
cheers,
Jess

Submitted by conect11 on 24 June 2007 - 7:44pm.

alright E.T.

phone home!