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is working for ya Styx…what a great read!

Thank you Moonman. I appreciate you reading and commenting on my little experiment. When I threw it out there, I did so timidly, but resolvedly. I expected it to get a lot of negative reviews, so your response surprised me, but I am nicely surprised. (By negative reviews, what I really mean is comments on how to improve. There must be a better way of saying that, but I couldn’t think of one.)

Cat

Well Cat I’ll be honest right off and say this is not the kind of poetry I enjoy but that is not to say it isn’t good at achieving its goal…especially given the subject. For me the hotch-potch imagery creates a deliberately disjointed impression that is the hallmark of most politicians who want to impress but dare not be too joined up in case anyone actually understands anything tangible that they are saying. The “verbiage spewing” line in your poem captures this admirably. I also like the way there are so many repetitions of words beginining with “com…” since that also captures the political tenet that every point must be made again and again in case they forget themselves what it is they are actually saying…mind you to be perfect they should have all started with “con…” instead.lol So please give your alter ego a deserved pat on the back. Keith

Hey Keith, you read me perfectly on this one. Wow, you’re good! This poem was born out of frustration over not being able to watch the news without having this media circus crammed down my throat. Thanks for your input, and remember your suggestions are always welcome.

Cat

Its got power Cat.
A poem like this will work best when spoken.
When the words are only read silently
they seem crass in parts, but if spoken with
energy and passion they would raise the roof!

All the best

eric

Yes eric, this poem was meant to be read aloud. The funny thing is, I could read it to another person, but the thought of reading it to a group makes me go weak in the knees. Thanks for reading. I’m glad you liked it!

Always, Cat

Good for you! I, too, am getting pretty sick of politics as well. Dems sounding like Repubs - it’s like a soap opera. I feel as though I should be in a theatre with popcorn and nachos. Your alter ego should be getting a standing ovation, and I wouldn’t change a word!

~Jess
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~ “Bush is listening…. use big words!”
~ I don’t SUFFER from insanity, I enjoy every minute of it!”

And it just keeps dragging on…
Thank you for your understanding
and your insightful comments.

the alter ego

Must have missed this one first time out just perfect I found myself cringing at some of those very very descriptive words the same way I cringe when I listen to the debates that are all sounding like a grammar school brawl and that is about as much as you will hear me say about politics or religion two subjects I stay away from otherwise the old soap box comes out and you know what happens when I star getting angry you and several other peeps have already said that the more angry I get the funnier I get oh well
even my own daughter
chrys

(perhaps) timidly designed to enrich the reader … and it does!

Thanx,
Chuck

PS: Powerful use of nouns and verbs. Good choices!

Timid, huh? LOL! My alter ego thanks you with much gratitude.

(Edge)

Buster’s become my alter eagle … er, I mean alter ego.

Yours,
Chuck