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Submitted by poewriter58 on 4 March 2008 - 6:40pm.| Updated 4 March 2008 - 8:22pm.
Style / Type:
freeform
co authored by C.A.Tetro and Gary Ferris Jr.
When you feel so tired and weary
And it seems like you can’t go on
Lost in a dreadful world of disorder
And your strength and hope is gone
Remember there is still someone
Whose heart beats strong and true
Now and for always
I believe in you
When time is short and friends are few
And the darkened troubles are on the rise
The sun stays hidden from your view
Your confidence is shrinking in size
Tomorrow may bring more troubles
More than one can bear alone
desperately in need of a friend
An uplifting voice on the phone
Bearing courage enough for two
Breathing new life into all that you do
Patiently waiting for you to shine through
Somehow knowing
I believe in you
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
This was another co write for my new book I thank Gary Ferris Jr. for his contribution
(5 votes)
Sorry, i am not so enamoured
Sorry, i am not so enamoured with this one. It swims very close
to that Bridge Over Troubled Waters ditty, and I think it could
be reduced by a couple of stanzas.
Like its theme and simplicity just think it lacks some
originality.
Going to hide now from your wrath.
All the best
eric
:-) Glad to hear that guys.
:-) Glad to hear that guys. I will try to be nice next time.
Much respect
eric
like a bridge over
troubbled waters I lay me down ;) or rather I am off to work here at 3 AM lol
Joy and Peace
Mark
Mark
Thank you (I think)
I happen to like that song oh well
Chrys
Merci
:-)
Chrys
Eric
I’m not that bad
No NO No wrath
you are entitled to your opinion lol
just watch your back now lol
Chrys
thanks for your input always appreciated
eric
you weren’t not nice this time no harm no foul
Could not be more of
a complement from me :)
Mark
Nice collaboration
Not bad, Chrys and Gary. (as I desperately hope that you don’t need me to rhyme in future endeavors, Crys!)
This reminds me of song lyrics. Should “Who’s” should be “Whose?” “Who’s” refers to “who is.” Somehow I don’t think that is what you meant there.
I know. I’m relentless. Take it out on me later. ;)
~ Ronda
it should yes
why have you something against rhyming darlin lol
thanks Ronda this one was easy wait till you see what I gave you
love the avatar wow that is eye catching
Chrys
Yes
We did
now stop gloating and being a self centered
well it was a pleasure writing this one you were easy to work with thanks
Chrys
Flow
This just flows like honey. So well done, I thoroughly enjoyed reading -I believe in you.
Thank you Chrys and Gary,
Mark
mark
Thank you so much how nice of you to say so
Chrys I’m sure Gary thanks you as well
I Believe In You
Can’t put my finger on it but it reminds me of a song, in the 60’s
When you’re down and out, and need a helping hand I’ll be there,
Oh yes I will, when you need a friend
don’t remember who sang it.
Anyway nicely written!
I think that one might be
I think that one might be James Taylor
thank you Janice and a thank you from Gary
you are not the first person to say it sounds like a song I just may have to put music to this one
Chrys
now now
Don’t be frettin none I’ve been thanking these good folks on your behalf as well see how thoughtful I am
I believe in you
You two did an excellent job on this one…
and It does sound a bit like a song..
and what is really wonderful is that you can’t tell two people did it..
like you both were on the same page in thinking..
well written..
great job Chrys and Gary…
BrownEyesBlue
thanks
from gary as well
He was very easy to work with
Hey Chrys and Gary!
Kudos to both of you because you worked a nice slice of art here! It spins out smooth as silk. And I believe in both of you, too!
Always, Cat
thank you Cat
and I must not forget Gary thanks you as well I’m sure
he is good people , and a good friend and was just so easy to work with it just fell into place
we didn’t do such a bad job either
Chrys
it’s a nice poem…i love
it’s a nice poem…i love the flow and the rhyme..
Josh
Josh
Thank you and I am sure Gary thanks you as well
Chrys