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Barbara Writes
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Submitted by Barbara Writes on 22 February 2008 - 10:31pm.| Updated 22 February 2008 - 10:41pm.
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Pain restricts sensitivity
Makes me slumber
For zeal of life
Sleep I do desire
From conflicts of pain
Causing me distress
Sleep frees the soul
Suffer interrupts
Pain has the mastery
Fall asleep in death
Makes the heart wander
Where pain never enters
Sleep from above
Hope for better days
In the resurrection
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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o me, three jerks to post. poe
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Barbara Writes I don’t fully understand your comment. “o me, three jerks to post poe” Do you think I post edgar allen poe’s poem. I wrote this yesterday because I am in pain and I write to take my mind off it. I wanted to express why I could not be kind and sensitive to my family who was trying to keep me from being overly sad. Writing poems help. They tell me I write my best when I am upset. If you think I post poe’s poem then I am a greater poetess than I imagine. O n my profile I mention I have no favorite poets because I was never into reading poems. I just write to feel better and make sense of my mental state. Now I read others poems who write these days. I try to learn poetic style from great poets here. I plan to read some of the great poets work but my tired eyes won’t allow it these days.
Sometimes
there are insensitive people who do not understand that the comments are meant to be an opportunity for constructive criticism. My suggestion would be to ignore them and pay closer attention to those of us who are here for support and direction.
You wrote for your own purpose here, and there is nothing wrong with that. Always remember, bearing your soul in public leaves it open to being wounded. Poetry is cathartic to many of us. In this piece you have honestly expressed pain through your eyes. I hope writing it helped alleviate some of that pain.
~ Ronda
thanks
Barbara Writes I appreciate your comment. I realize some people are like that. I try to see what is the underlining cause of a comment if I can’t see one I will ask for understanding or share what I think cause the insensitive comment. If I feel it was sheer meaness I just don’t respond. Wounded yes, but I ask for raw truth. What ever his reason for commenting it is his I can feel it, put it in a poem or like you say ignore it. The site is here to support and direct like you say and I embrace that.
Barbara
How I Feel Pain
Keep writing Barbara! I felt your pain and that is what we do, bring someone there
is it not?~
Appreciate
Barbara Writes appreciate your comment. Glad you could be there
wihtout feeling the actual pain.