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Submitted by Kieran Nelson on 15 February 2008 - 3:58pm.
Style / Type:
freeform
my ebb
my flow
there it goes
on and on
through tiny doors
my thoughts
and failings
in a row
there it goes
my ebb
my flow
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Even though this is really short, what do you think of it? It just came to me quickly in the morning!
Sorry for posting twice in one day, this is jsut a little extra I wantedyour thoughts on.
(1 vote)
Ebb
cute, I liked it