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Submitted by poewriter58 on 7 February 2008 - 11:03pm.
Style / Type:
freeform
See how calm the ocean lies
Yet beneath she is taunted by changing tides
Watch as her waves caress the shore
Yet her gentle whispers can turn to roars
She can hold you captive in her blue green maze
Yet beware lest she show you her blacks and her grays
She is holding the temperament of serenity in each roll and swell
Yet she is hiding the burning vengeance of hell
So don’t think it unjust
Should I have the notion
That I am that lady
And the lady is an ocean
Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
A painter paints a self portrait, I have penned a self portrait
title poem of my book
(4 votes)
I am familar with this type of woman
and woe be unto him who does her wrong! Lovely, angry, threatening, feminine poem.
RT
One of my favorites
of all your poems. You know how I feel about this one, as I’ve told you before. It is a beautiful poem straight from the heart…
Cat
wow
I don’t know what to say after a comment like that one other than thank you
love the picture almost like the one I used for my cover
thanks again
Chrys
Lady T
Thank you so much I appreciate your comment I guess I’ve chosen an appropriate poem as a title poem
truth be known when I wrote this I was sitting not on the shoreline of the ocean but a riverbank(lol) but I do feel ocean more aptly describes the author
Chrys
I Love this!
forgive me
I don’t know how I missed this comment
A very belated thank you
Threatening lol?
Chrys
Roars
I could feel the different sides. The fourth line felt a bit abrupt and I wonder if that is what you desired?
Mark
thank you
Thanks Mark I really don’t feel the abruptness that you mention. But then again maybe I hear it differently. never gave that a thought,interesting to know
chrys
not sure
if it’s criticism you want, because i don’t have any. i really liked this, the way it flows, your choice of words. i’m starting to become a fan of your work. =) i don’t really understand what you might have been feeling but i feel something when i read it. just want to say that it’s great. whatever you were trying to achieve with this, i think you did.
this might be something epic.
i know i’ll remember it.
it okay if i save this, keep it?
i’d love to share it with my mom..
i think she’d like it.
=)
kudos there poewriter58, kudos
well now
Thank you for those generous words sure you can save it. I’m quite flattered
All I can say is it is me and who I am
Chrys
Back
To think of all the self portraitish (if that is a word lol) writing that I have read hmm most of it in the form of “how much I do not care for myself” Chrys, this is really outstanding. It is unique to me and stands out on it’s own above anything I have read in regards to one writing about one’s self. It is an honor to read what you have shared here. Really, Chris, I hope this inspires others or at the very least turns into a challenge for some if not many :)
Truly,
Mark
Must have done
something right if you came back to it. Thank you Mark that is very generous of you. I try what else can I say (Love the avatar)
Chrys
This is a wonderful picture...
and when I got to the end I had to read it again..loved it.
Thank you
It’s so nice to hear when someone reads my work more than once
I’m glad to hear it was a source of enjoyment for you
Chrys
I have felt the connection
I have felt the connection between women and the sea - and not only because I like to beside them both! Maybe it has something to do with the ocean’s fluctuating moods and the influence of the moon’s pull, or perhaps its terrifying and unknowable depths. Certainly, anyone who has lived by the sea knows to judge the sea by its colours, and a sage would apply that wisdom to his lady.
Beautifully written and a most fitting title poem.
A picture for you to go with your poem … http://www.flickr.com/photos/7911705@N07/467027679/sizes/o/
Mike
“not all matterings of mind equal one violet” ~ e e cummings ~